Stories and Poems for the Holidays
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "A Halloween Story"Holiday musings.
21 total reviews
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This was a very good story. It was exciting and interesting. It flowed well. It is well written. You have a good imagination. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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This was a very good story. It was exciting and interesting. It flowed well. It is well written. You have a good imagination. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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I'm glad you liked my Halloween story. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
It's a great story, Beth. The only thing which is beyond me is the availability of guns. That is alien to me and rather incomprehensible to me. It just shouldn't be possible. Good luck. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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It's a great story, Beth. The only thing which is beyond me is the availability of guns. That is alien to me and rather incomprehensible to me. It just shouldn't be possible. Good luck. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thank you Ulla, I wish we didn't have guns. I've been around them all my life. I guess when this land was young and wild wilderness people needed them for protection but no more. Without them there would be less need for protection. I appreciate the review.
Beth
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We are so in agreement.:)))
Comment from lyenochka
This is a good redemption story. It reminds me of several stories where one eccentric recluse is misunderstood by the rest of the town but both the hermit and the outsiders come to accept one another. Best wishes in the contest!
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This is a good redemption story. It reminds me of several stories where one eccentric recluse is misunderstood by the rest of the town but both the hermit and the outsiders come to accept one another. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
Comment from GWHARGIS
I was always the voice of reason just like your narrator. I really enjoyed this story. It had festive mischief and spirited characters. But I like the unlikely way it ended. This could have gone south quickly. But you managed to weave a lesson in there. Great Halloween story. Gretchen
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I was always the voice of reason just like your narrator. I really enjoyed this story. It had festive mischief and spirited characters. But I like the unlikely way it ended. This could have gone south quickly. But you managed to weave a lesson in there. Great Halloween story. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
Comment from patcelaw
@ This is very well written, and it was a pleasure to listen to. It held my attention the whole way through. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you a very best in the contest and may you have a lovely day and may God bless your weekend. Patricia.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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@ This is very well written, and it was a pleasure to listen to. It held my attention the whole way through. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you a very best in the contest and may you have a lovely day and may God bless your weekend. Patricia.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Patricia. I'm glad you liked listening to my Halloween story.
Beth
Comment from estory
I thought this was a great story, maybe the best original Halloween story I have ever read on Fanstory. You tell it really well with plenty of tension in the voice, and you created some larger than life characters, particularly the old lady who has sealed herself off for whatever the reason. The kids, of course, are being kids. You put us in the middle of the action, standing with you behind the tree, watching the kids at their mischief, which they think is innocent fun. The moment when she fires that gun becomes a watershed moment for everybody. The kids learn to have some respect for the lady, the lady learns she can't handle the whole neighborhood by herself. I thought it was very realistic, the dialogue was sharp and tight, and the emotions come through in it. Lots of polish on it as well. Great writing. estory
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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I thought this was a great story, maybe the best original Halloween story I have ever read on Fanstory. You tell it really well with plenty of tension in the voice, and you created some larger than life characters, particularly the old lady who has sealed herself off for whatever the reason. The kids, of course, are being kids. You put us in the middle of the action, standing with you behind the tree, watching the kids at their mischief, which they think is innocent fun. The moment when she fires that gun becomes a watershed moment for everybody. The kids learn to have some respect for the lady, the lady learns she can't handle the whole neighborhood by herself. I thought it was very realistic, the dialogue was sharp and tight, and the emotions come through in it. Lots of polish on it as well. Great writing. estory
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much for a great review. I appreciate the six stars. This was a pleasure to read. I'm glad you enjoyed my story.
Beth
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Thank you so much for a great review. I appreciate the six stars. This was a pleasure to read. I'm glad you enjoyed my story.
Beth
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Thank you so much for a great review. I appreciate the six stars. This was a pleasure to read. I'm glad you enjoyed my story.
Beth
Comment from zanya
Yes an interesting Halloween tale where, fortunately, all turns out well in the end - even older folk still have lessons to learn - an authentic tone to the events.
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Yes an interesting Halloween tale where, fortunately, all turns out well in the end - even older folk still have lessons to learn - an authentic tone to the events.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Because of my condition, I could be isolated, but I do not see it that way. I talk to folks from all over the world, using snail mail, email, and FanStory. My sisters take me on errands, and come by a couple times a week. I know there are people worse off than me , so I do not throw any pity parties for myself. Never have, Another good story. Karen
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Because of my condition, I could be isolated, but I do not see it that way. I talk to folks from all over the world, using snail mail, email, and FanStory. My sisters take me on errands, and come by a couple times a week. I know there are people worse off than me , so I do not throw any pity parties for myself. Never have, Another good story. Karen
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank for the review. I'm alone to and I fine with it. I take to people by phone and on the computer and do things with my kids evrey week and go to the YMCA and workout when I want to. I have a lot of friends there so I happy even if am an old lady who thinks she 20.
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I never really think about being old unless I look in a mirror, and I don't do that often. Karen
Comment from jim vecchio
My first reply disappeared. I said how this was a good positive Halloween story rather than the usual Halloween monster type. This was very good, but I found two small hiccups:
"She had some kind of arrangement with the grocery store to deliv byer her food" andIt sounded like, Patti. (no comm needed) and
"That we be enough to drive me crazy"
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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My first reply disappeared. I said how this was a good positive Halloween story rather than the usual Halloween monster type. This was very good, but I found two small hiccups:
"She had some kind of arrangement with the grocery store to deliv byer her food" andIt sounded like, Patti. (no comm needed) and
"That we be enough to drive me crazy"
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Jim. I keep having things I've written disappear too. I appreciate the review and the help with corrections.
Beth
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I always leave typos, no matter how many times I edit them.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A wise decision on the part of the narrator and Patti to take a low key part in the celebrations in future. A nice build-up to the unexpectedly violent response by Mrs Higginbotham. I must admit I felt rather sorry for her in the end. A fine lesson learned by the girls. Good luck, Beth. Debbie
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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A wise decision on the part of the narrator and Patti to take a low key part in the celebrations in future. A nice build-up to the unexpectedly violent response by Mrs Higginbotham. I must admit I felt rather sorry for her in the end. A fine lesson learned by the girls. Good luck, Beth. Debbie
It wouldn't have hurt her to (have) bought
...with the grocery store to (deliver)...
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Debbie.
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Thank you, Debbie.