Finding the Woods
Trees5 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your inventive post about our trees and how they reach upward toward the light and flourish. A fine poem for the contest and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed your inventive post about our trees and how they reach upward toward the light and flourish. A fine poem for the contest and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your review, I am a new at writing any poetry, A definite learning process. Many more
Comment from Jewell Hermann
Good poem
The middle line is my fav
but the last line changes the tense and doesn't flow with the rest of the poem. I can't think of a better line that's five syllables, so if you expand the poem and flesh out the idea more that would be cool.
Welcome to Fanstory.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Good poem
The middle line is my fav
but the last line changes the tense and doesn't flow with the rest of the poem. I can't think of a better line that's five syllables, so if you expand the poem and flesh out the idea more that would be cool.
Welcome to Fanstory.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Appreciate your comments on how to improve this. A new line.
The sky exists, find light. I am totally new at this. Have many poems already written.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet,
Yes trees especially those that form a forest or woods have a huge underground network of roots and when a tree is sick the others try to help it offering nutrients.
Our ancestors lived in trees that s why when we take a walk in the woods we feel a strong connection.
It's like going back home.
PS I enjoyed reading your poem but unfortunately the syllable count is wrong in the second and last line.
You have 5-8-7 instead it should be 5-7-5
Best of luck!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Ciao mystery poet,
Yes trees especially those that form a forest or woods have a huge underground network of roots and when a tree is sick the others try to help it offering nutrients.
Our ancestors lived in trees that s why when we take a walk in the woods we feel a strong connection.
It's like going back home.
PS I enjoyed reading your poem but unfortunately the syllable count is wrong in the second and last line.
You have 5-8-7 instead it should be 5-7-5
Best of luck!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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I will learn, your comments tell me how to improve. Now understand syllables verses some words. Understanding the difference is obviously important. Thanks
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Congrats on your first post! What a beautifully written and uplifting poem! I like how you used the contest prompt. You've shown a beautiful image of trees and how they grow. But reading into it, I don't think you are talking about trees. We should all "find sunlight" and "branch out". So creatively written and again so uplifting! Great job.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Congrats on your first post! What a beautifully written and uplifting poem! I like how you used the contest prompt. You've shown a beautiful image of trees and how they grow. But reading into it, I don't think you are talking about trees. We should all "find sunlight" and "branch out". So creatively written and again so uplifting! Great job.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thanks, you truly understand the underlying message. We are all trees in reality. One with Mother Nature. The earth is your mother. Live with her.
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Thank you!
Comment from Carol Clark2
Welcome to FanStory, and congratulations on your first post! You have interesting details in your poem. A 5-7-5 counts the number of syllables in each line, but not necessarily the number of words. You can edit your post. There's so much to learn on this site, but people are happy to help out. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Welcome to FanStory, and congratulations on your first post! You have interesting details in your poem. A 5-7-5 counts the number of syllables in each line, but not necessarily the number of words. You can edit your post. There's so much to learn on this site, but people are happy to help out. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Learning from everyone. Will change for the better. Live long, give long, be strong.
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Thank you!
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You're welcome. I hope you make many good friends on this site. Carol
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I've learned so much on this site. I never knew there were so many kinds of poems to write. Have a blessed week.
Carol