Shrouded
Three-six-nine35 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a lovely 3-6-9 poem. I like the metaphor of the shroud for the fog. Yes, the fog does bring out those feelings of loneliness and solitude. Nicely done. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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This is a lovely 3-6-9 poem. I like the metaphor of the shroud for the fog. Yes, the fog does bring out those feelings of loneliness and solitude. Nicely done. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much for the generous review.
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My pleasure. I enjoyed your poem.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi DonandVicki,
This poem fit the contest well. The words and artwork work well together to show how lost we can sometimes feel in the midst of our problems before we solve them.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Hi DonandVicki,
This poem fit the contest well. The words and artwork work well together to show how lost we can sometimes feel in the midst of our problems before we solve them.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you so very much.
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Don't mention it, D&V.
Joan
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Captures the mood of being lost in the fog
I like how you build the poem from the individual level one person's experiene at a time
oneliness
removed from space and time
invasive vapor envelops me
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Captures the mood of being lost in the fog
I like how you build the poem from the individual level one person's experiene at a time
oneliness
removed from space and time
invasive vapor envelops me
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Aussie
Shrouded by fog is a great little 3-6-9 poem and I wish you well in the contest. A deep fog surrounding us is like being without our heavenly Father to guide us. Lost, alone, scared and looking for the Sonlight. Blessings, K.xx
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Shrouded by fog is a great little 3-6-9 poem and I wish you well in the contest. A deep fog surrounding us is like being without our heavenly Father to guide us. Lost, alone, scared and looking for the Sonlight. Blessings, K.xx
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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I love the "Sonlight" clever and very generous of you.
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Thank you both. K xx
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh my goodness what a cold and, yes, LONELY poem... from the beginning of the first verse to the last line, I had to give my cat a pet to remind me I wasn't by myself!! A wonderful contest entry here -- best of luck to you! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Oh my goodness what a cold and, yes, LONELY poem... from the beginning of the first verse to the last line, I had to give my cat a pet to remind me I wasn't by myself!! A wonderful contest entry here -- best of luck to you! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you Yvette, your comments and review are always so very kind and welcome.
Comment from ESOSTINE
This 3-6-9 sequence has a master touch. The flow was smooth, and the theme great. I love the imagery in the poem. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Well done, dear Donandvicki. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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This 3-6-9 sequence has a master touch. The flow was smooth, and the theme great. I love the imagery in the poem. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Well done, dear Donandvicki. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from Me and Erin G
Excellent work here on the 3-6-9. Great image as well.
Love the sequencing of "the white shroud of invisibility" to "invasive vapor envelops me" and then your last line sums it up perfectly: "deep longing for illumination".
I hope this poem was a result of inspiration rather than real life.
p.s. thank you for your review of my "love is the storm" free verse poem. I appreciate you taking the time to give me your feedback.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Excellent work here on the 3-6-9. Great image as well.
Love the sequencing of "the white shroud of invisibility" to "invasive vapor envelops me" and then your last line sums it up perfectly: "deep longing for illumination".
I hope this poem was a result of inspiration rather than real life.
p.s. thank you for your review of my "love is the storm" free verse poem. I appreciate you taking the time to give me your feedback.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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You are so very kind and generous.
Comment from Gunner Lil
An excellent photo the writer used for this poem.
It is an easy read that also has a nice pace.
The flow from line to line is also great. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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An excellent photo the writer used for this poem.
It is an easy read that also has a nice pace.
The flow from line to line is also great. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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You are so very kind and generous.
Comment from estory
I really liked this haiku sequence. There was the perfect balance, the nature imagery, and also a lovely musical element that came through the alliterations, rhymes and rhythm of the language. I thought you did a great job creating this mysterious sense of uncertainty, with all these images of fog and loneliness. You feel like you are alone in a strange place, you don't know where you are or what will happen next. estory
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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I really liked this haiku sequence. There was the perfect balance, the nature imagery, and also a lovely musical element that came through the alliterations, rhymes and rhythm of the language. I thought you did a great job creating this mysterious sense of uncertainty, with all these images of fog and loneliness. You feel like you are alone in a strange place, you don't know where you are or what will happen next. estory
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you estory, I am honered.
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
I love this piece. You capture solitude perfectly, with beautiful language. I particularly enjoyed:
"loneliness
removed from space and time
invasive vapor envelops me"
Gorgeous writing, and lovely use of this form!
Xo
Jess
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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I love this piece. You capture solitude perfectly, with beautiful language. I particularly enjoyed:
"loneliness
removed from space and time
invasive vapor envelops me"
Gorgeous writing, and lovely use of this form!
Xo
Jess
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Jessica, you are so sweet and generous. Thank you for the six and kind review.
