Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I am having so much fun listening to all the different versions of the party. It seems to me that everyone that is written their version of the party gets into the food fight thing and that's just makes me think. Are these adults or these junior high kids. Patricia.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024

I think Rachelle and Gretchen tapped into the junior high school kid in us. Who doesn't love a good food fight?

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I 'm afraid Iwould be under the table with Gretchen while the food fight was in progress, I think the party turned up anotch when you arrived Jim, you bought out the raucous in everybody. Loved the ending, 'cause I always loved that song.
Well done with your fanstory convention,
still smiling,
valda

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024

Just call me a party animal, Valda! In actuality, I'm a rather unassuming and shy type, but it's fun to be portrayed this way.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Well, I do know that song by Joni Mitchell - I used to sing it in high school and figured out the chords myself. Well, it's clear that Jane cheated which is something that Rachelle cannot abide. So I'm sure she will find a way to find justice in this situation. Fun story given the challenge!

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024

No, this result cannot stand. I agree; Rachelle will find a way to right the wrong.

I really enjoyed getting to contribute to this marvelous story. I had this thought a couple weeks ago that I would love to contribute a chapter, and then we get the opportunity!

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I've enjoyed reading your version of what happened at the convention, as I have enjoyed all the different perspectives. And everyone pulls new FanStory members into the mix, which also makes it interesting.

Thanks for sharing, Jim.

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

I confess to being a little confused by your review, Pam. In the second paragraph, it isn't "despite" the fact the ballot box was stuffed that the cheater wins; it's possibly because of it, but we may never know for sure. And yes, it was meant to sound like both the last election and the upcoming election in terms of the personalities involved and the charges that were made about cheating.

The part I really didn't get though was "A different take on this, Jim - let the writers write their way out." Could you clarify what you meant here?

Comment from LJbutterfly

Exceptional

I thoroughly enjoyed Rachelle and Gretchen's book describing their adventures getting to the FanStory Convention, but WOW! I read three other versions, including Begin Again who brought male strippers to the party, but this was extraordinarily imaginative. You brought in Lea Tonin and Lancellot, which gave your version a measure of reality.

I loved the idea of the poetry contest and how it resembled our current political climate. Even though Jane cheated to win, Rachelle's venomous poem made me feel justice had been served. I loved her poem, and your creativity. I'm sorry you threw Rachelle out, but I liked her swan song.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

Thanks so much, Lorraine. You took this in the spirit with which it was intended. Yeah, I thought this would be a little different take on things. Rachelle seemed to enjoy it too from her review. It was fun to tweak her a little bit. And Lance too with his hookers.

I think a lot of us had fun adding to this wonderfully funny story. I'm glad they gave us the opportunity to.

Thanks for those 6 stars too!

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

OH MY GOSH!! This was so freaking funny. I do remember Jane you ignorant shut. Vividly. This was a fun romp and Lance , uh "coming" to save the day was over the top comedy. Very funny stuff. Gretchen

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

Thanks so much, Gretchen. I had a lot of fun with this. I think everyone who's had a chance to contribute to your marvelous story has had a lot of fun too. Thanks for giving us this opportunity.

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Good

I do not deal with Rachel anymore. I and others have blocked her. She is blocked on our email too. None of us need the drama. Your solution was odd. Mentioning women as a commodity lowers my opinion also. This whole thing made me sad. The shrimp cocktail thing was funny though. Karen

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

Context is everything, Karen. Of course my solution was odd. This was meant to be a spoof of the upcoming presidential election with Rachelle and Jane representing the two candidates. The hookers who had Lance tied up was my way of poking a little fun at Lance, who often writes about hookers. I don't think you took this in the spirit with which it was intended.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 29-Oct-2024

I do not accept that you would think it acceptable to talk about women as a commodity in the context of a gathering that is 75% women. Men as strippers okay. Know your audience. With dump the trump blasting the airwaves with his devaluation of women I might be a tad sensitive. Karen

reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

That seems like a double-standard to me that it's okay for women to write about male strippers, but it's not okay for me to mention that there is such a thing as hookers.

Comedy pokes fun at things. I was having a little fun with Lance here because he has posted many humorous stories involving hookers.

It's unfortunate that so many people these days are so sensitive and so easily offended. Comedians (not that I'm one) in general have a very tough time these days not offending people. Some find it very limiting what they can joke about. But that's why I love Ricky Gervais. He doesn't care who he offends and isn't afraid to skewer anybody.

Look at all your stories about killing rotten men. Some may find that offensive to always look at men that way, but I'm not offended and find them amusing. I guess what I'm saying is, lighten up a little and don't be so eager to be offended.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Very funny but I can't believe no one recognized "Both Sides Now." Were all the guests under forty? Poor Gretchen gives a party and is asked to leave. How totally unfair. I call for another vote. Have them write a limerick. Jane will only know filthy ones.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

Thanks, Carol. This whole story has been a lot of fun, and I think it was great that they let the readers contribute. I've been enjoying all the chapters submitted.

Comment from T B Botts

Exceptional

Hello Jim,
this was just too funny! I absolutely loved that Lea dipped her shrimp in the sauce that was smeared over your face. I would suspect that cocktail sauce would be spicy enough to create problems if it got in your hair. I loved the poems too, and yes, I do remember Dan Aykroyd calling Jane Curtain a slut. You had me laughing out loud several times as I was reading this, so in my eyes, your work is worth a six. Well done my friend.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

Thanks so much, Tom. I appreciate the 6 too. I had a lot of fun writing this. A couple of weeks ago, I had the thought about adding a chapter to this story, and my dream came true.

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

You have given an interesting chronology of events at the convention. With all of the personal interactions that occurred, I found it a little ironic and amusing that Rachelle is the one who got thrown out of the party. That was a twist I was not expecting. Your narration was good. The party ended up as a surprise to just about everyone, particularly Rachelle.

Robert

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024

As Lance would say, thank you very much. This was a lot of fun participating in this riotous tale. What a great idea they had to open it up to different versions of the party.