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Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Powder Keg"Two very real women in not so real situation.
32 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
I can only vote for one of you, Gretchen, and I have been following your joint story through Rachelle's posts. This food fight and introduction to Mr. Ens is fun, along with the potato salad dunking. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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I can only vote for one of you, Gretchen, and I have been following your joint story through Rachelle's posts. This food fight and introduction to Mr. Ens is fun, along with the potato salad dunking. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm so happy you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Esther Brown
I have loved reading the entries I have seen so far. What a great idea! Is there a place where I can see all of them in one place? Some of the people mentioned I have not "fanned" so might miss something. Esther
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2024
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I have loved reading the entries I have seen so far. What a great idea! Is there a place where I can see all of them in one place? Some of the people mentioned I have not "fanned" so might miss something. Esther
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2024
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Thank you. They are listed in the book under chapter 38. Gretchen
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Thanks...I will go hunting.
Comment from lyenochka
I loved your BMX explanation! Personally, I would have been tickled pink to wear the same dress as someone or at least found it hilarious. But I don't go to parties like that as I prefer small gatherings where we can get to know people. I wonder how many times a week Mr. End is asked for more sixes. Poor guy!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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I loved your BMX explanation! Personally, I would have been tickled pink to wear the same dress as someone or at least found it hilarious. But I don't go to parties like that as I prefer small gatherings where we can get to know people. I wonder how many times a week Mr. End is asked for more sixes. Poor guy!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you. I'm glad you found the humor in this chapter. Gretchen
Comment from judiverse
This was fun. You kind of spoiled my dream of attending a FS convention, though. I wouldn't want it to turn out like this. I can see hiding under the table. I love that Jane had to declare "Twinsies." That was the final straw and no wonder. I'm glad you had Tom in the midst of it all. I thought it was funny you had the nerve to ask if there couldn't be more 6-stars for the week, with all the chaos going on. judi
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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This was fun. You kind of spoiled my dream of attending a FS convention, though. I wouldn't want it to turn out like this. I can see hiding under the table. I love that Jane had to declare "Twinsies." That was the final straw and no wonder. I'm glad you had Tom in the midst of it all. I thought it was funny you had the nerve to ask if there couldn't be more 6-stars for the week, with all the chaos going on. judi
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Judi. This was a fun scene to write. The real me would have high tailed it back to my room. Lol. Thanks so much. Gretchen
Comment from Julie Helms
I feel late to the party on this one but will see about catching up. I love the humor throughout this. I love that you had no idea who 'the man' was and it is The Tom ....just brilliant!
A couple suggestions:
Somewhere from the room I hear a voice whisper, "She's wearing the same dress."
(Maybe because I am late to the party, I didn't get this at first...so maybe not an issue...but I read this in the sense of "She's wearing the same dress...again", not "She's wearing the same dress as Rachelle." I didn't pick up on the difference for a few more paragraphs. One thought: "They are both wearing the same dress.")
"She's a bout to get the horns of the goat,"
(about)
This is a lot of fun and a fun project!
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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I feel late to the party on this one but will see about catching up. I love the humor throughout this. I love that you had no idea who 'the man' was and it is The Tom ....just brilliant!
A couple suggestions:
Somewhere from the room I hear a voice whisper, "She's wearing the same dress."
(Maybe because I am late to the party, I didn't get this at first...so maybe not an issue...but I read this in the sense of "She's wearing the same dress...again", not "She's wearing the same dress as Rachelle." I didn't pick up on the difference for a few more paragraphs. One thought: "They are both wearing the same dress.")
"She's a bout to get the horns of the goat,"
(about)
This is a lot of fun and a fun project!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the edits. Very appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from pome lover
well, my first thought, or rather one of them, is has Tom seen this? I wonder what his reaction to the situation is? and where is what's her name, Jane's friend? next thought, no, honestly, this one was first, were the guests picked for having the most posts? I was surprised to see Roy there in yall's fun group of revelers. Tom sure sounded royally pissed, if you'll pardon my french. I wonder if he'll deduct points for the food throwers? ha! And Dolly, who'd athunk? good for her.
Good, crazy developments at the convention. I would not have imagined this scenario. The more I think about it, I have to say I feel sorry for Tom.
Yall really have created a most unlikable villain in Janiekins. You and Rachelle have delighted in creating mayhem. I look forward to what happens next.
Katharine
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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well, my first thought, or rather one of them, is has Tom seen this? I wonder what his reaction to the situation is? and where is what's her name, Jane's friend? next thought, no, honestly, this one was first, were the guests picked for having the most posts? I was surprised to see Roy there in yall's fun group of revelers. Tom sure sounded royally pissed, if you'll pardon my french. I wonder if he'll deduct points for the food throwers? ha! And Dolly, who'd athunk? good for her.
Good, crazy developments at the convention. I would not have imagined this scenario. The more I think about it, I have to say I feel sorry for Tom.
Yall really have created a most unlikable villain in Janiekins. You and Rachelle have delighted in creating mayhem. I look forward to what happens next.
Katharine
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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I sure hope you'll post your version. I want everyone to add their 2 cents worth. Thank you for this wonderful review and the extra star. Gretchen
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I did. :)
Comment from Neonewman
Stellar performance, Gretchen! Between yours and Rachelle's, my stomach aches from laughter. I knew Rachelle wasn't going to take that crap from Jane! This was the perfect ending.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Stellar performance, Gretchen! Between yours and Rachelle's, my stomach aches from laughter. I knew Rachelle wasn't going to take that crap from Jane! This was the perfect ending.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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One more chapter then it's finished. Thank you so much. I hope you'll join in the fun and post a chapter of the convention. Thank you so much for this awesome review and the extra star. Gretchen
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One more chapter! That's exciting. Can I view the other participants' work as well?
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I believe so. Probably go to the book and look fir chapter 38. There are about 9entrues so far. All great!
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LOL! Okay.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. Your story flows very well when it is read aloud. What makes for a good story being read aloud is the punctuation is very good and your sentence structure is exquisite. Have a lovely day and may God bless you. Also have a lovely week. Patricia.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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This is very well written and I enjoyed very much listening to it. Your story flows very well when it is read aloud. What makes for a good story being read aloud is the punctuation is very good and your sentence structure is exquisite. Have a lovely day and may God bless you. Also have a lovely week. Patricia.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Patricia. I'm so happy you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
Hahaha! I absolutely love where you took this. There are so many genius little details that I found a little too relatable. The crawling under the table, the swigging of the wine, the asking Tom about more sixes in the middle of chaos- I can't get enough! You two have created something very special, and I have truly enjoyed every stop along this adventure.
Xo
Jess
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Hahaha! I absolutely love where you took this. There are so many genius little details that I found a little too relatable. The crawling under the table, the swigging of the wine, the asking Tom about more sixes in the middle of chaos- I can't get enough! You two have created something very special, and I have truly enjoyed every stop along this adventure.
Xo
Jess
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jessica. I don't think I've ever had so much fun writing about an imaginary trip. Hope you will join in if you already haven't. Thank you so much for the wonderful review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a fun chapter! I like that the two of you have opened this book to other FS writers. Great idea including Tom in the story. I love his reaction to the food fight. Good job on the book. Carol
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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This is a fun chapter! I like that the two of you have opened this book to other FS writers. Great idea including Tom in the story. I love his reaction to the food fight. Good job on the book. Carol
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm so glad others are having fun with this. Hope you will add a chapter as well. Gretchen
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Thanks for the invitation. I've read a number of the added chapters, and they're lots of fun. Carol