The Gift
What if you were the last tree?40 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very nicely done. I would say that this had a creepy dystopic feel to it.
Loved this line:
We were infinity, now the singularity
Nice writing!!!
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Very nicely done. I would say that this had a creepy dystopic feel to it.
Loved this line:
We were infinity, now the singularity
Nice writing!!!
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Douglas. I'm really happy you liked it. Sometimes it's a little too abstract for some but not in the case here.
Comment from Avery Daniel
Wow! This should be featured on some sort of wildlife site! Just a brilliant display of lexicon. Each stanza made me want to read more and more, then boom a killer ending! Great job, a poem well crafted.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Wow! This should be featured on some sort of wildlife site! Just a brilliant display of lexicon. Each stanza made me want to read more and more, then boom a killer ending! Great job, a poem well crafted.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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I'm happy you like this one Avery, thank you very much. I appreciate your kindness and your time. Great rating. If you have a little bit better now, thank you! I trust you'll have a happy holiday with you and yours. Thank you again.Have a great night!
Comment from 3rd Sight.
Love the way you expressed yourself in this piece. It's so sophisticated, brilliant, and it's so easy to follow, and I love the creativity with words. Great job! And good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Love the way you expressed yourself in this piece. It's so sophisticated, brilliant, and it's so easy to follow, and I love the creativity with words. Great job! And good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much, that's a really kind review.I appreciate it! So glad you liked it and to follow you.It's great insight too I might add! Thank you so much for reading a fine rating and for your time.I hope you have the best evening!
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Thanks! For the kind response, and have a great day.
Comment from poetwatch
Lea, you pen for the helpless those that have no say. You are correct for humanity care little about the planet and we are destroying it. We need to be aware and care as well as voice our objection to what is happening around us. Not many can see, but many just don't care. This is a good entry for the Free Forn Poetry Contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Lea, you pen for the helpless those that have no say. You are correct for humanity care little about the planet and we are destroying it. We need to be aware and care as well as voice our objection to what is happening around us. Not many can see, but many just don't care. This is a good entry for the Free Forn Poetry Contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much.I'm so glad you like it! I see you have great insight too.
So many don't believe in climate change, and yet the evidence is before our eyes every day. Thanks for your kind words for your great review an awesome rating but most of all for your time in doing so I hope you have a great night!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Such a sad poem filled with so much truth that too many try to deny. The saddest part of all is that when it eventually happens we will have only ourselves to blame. Your last line is perfect.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Such a sad poem filled with so much truth that too many try to deny. The saddest part of all is that when it eventually happens we will have only ourselves to blame. Your last line is perfect.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much. For your awesome review, I could see that it's got the message across. I thank you for reading and stopping in and offering your great comments. And you're absolutely right, right. We have only ourselves to blame. While the oceans get depleted, the forests are cut down. Go hand and c is polluted. We gotta be the dumbest smart people in the universe! Thank you marilyn for your thoughtsfield review and for your fine rating for your time list of all. I hope you have an awesome day!
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your poem is a powerful and thought-provoking piece that skillfully combines vivid imagery, emotional depth, and a poignant message. It captures the essence of environmental degradation and the urgent need for awareness and action. The free verse form allows for a raw and unrestricted expression of the themes, making it a compelling and moving read. Well done!
Beautiful Picture!
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Your poem is a powerful and thought-provoking piece that skillfully combines vivid imagery, emotional depth, and a poignant message. It captures the essence of environmental degradation and the urgent need for awareness and action. The free verse form allows for a raw and unrestricted expression of the themes, making it a compelling and moving read. Well done!
Beautiful Picture!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you again, Peter, that's so awesome.What a great review. Thanks so much! You see so much which is a great thing.I think to be a writer, you need to be able to see and you have that in spades! Thank you again for offering your thoughts and for your time. Most of all. Hoping you and yours are safe and doing well!
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You are welcome my friend
Kind regards
Comment from Trina Layne
Many powerful words and ideas are here, but I found some parts of the poem to be a bit obscure. Somehow I think the ending lines would have worked better as the opening. Kind regards, TLayne.
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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Many powerful words and ideas are here, but I found some parts of the poem to be a bit obscure. Somehow I think the ending lines would have worked better as the opening. Kind regards, TLayne.
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Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Thank you, trina that's an intriguing idea! I might have to play with it a little bit. That's what I love about reviews.They offer the perspective of the reader which you have given, and thank you very much for! Thank you for your kind words, your delivery and your time.Most of all, and I hope that you and yours are doing well, thank you again!
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No problem. I welcome constructive criticism. I think we are all here to grow. I am glad you found it useful.
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I did and I especially appreciate your delivery! There are those who don't remember there's a human being on the other end. Thank you for that, keep them coming. You've got great ideas!
Comment from shad blunt
Love the way you have set this up with the single tree standing alone, only to gaze down upon the waters that replenish its roots to grow.
May its leaves find the shore once more. Shadrach
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Love the way you have set this up with the single tree standing alone, only to gaze down upon the waters that replenish its roots to grow.
May its leaves find the shore once more. Shadrach
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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What a beautiful way to word of review! That's wonderful thank you very much! I too hope for the best! I'm especially glad that you like it. Thank you for your review for your time for the great rating.Thanks for the thoughtful way you responded! I wish you all the best.Thank you again!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The last tree. Can you imagine it? When we see the trees being cut down to make way for farms, houses, playing fields, we are killing not only the trees but our planet. You poem paints a grim picture, Lea. I can only hope the governments stop all this wanton distruction. We've done too much damage already, and the planet is fighting back with the floods, fires, earthquakes... etc. And it is all our fault! Well done for writing this, and good luck in the contest. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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The last tree. Can you imagine it? When we see the trees being cut down to make way for farms, houses, playing fields, we are killing not only the trees but our planet. You poem paints a grim picture, Lea. I can only hope the governments stop all this wanton distruction. We've done too much damage already, and the planet is fighting back with the floods, fires, earthquakes... etc. And it is all our fault! Well done for writing this, and good luck in the contest. Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Sandra, thank you very much. Yes, climate change the rampant usage of Earth resources. It's all going to run out because we are the immediate gratification society to heck with the consequences. Unfortunately, that's the mindset of a lot of people. Or they'll have excuses. God, maybe do it, so it must be God. I say crap to that! I've probably done a couple of reels on climate change that have I don't know that place i'm thinking about rereleasing them. I'm really glad you liked this Palm and that you completely understood you have incredible insight and also empathy. Great thing for a talented writer. Thank you so much.I appreciate you!
Comment from GWHARGIS
I take it this is about a lot more than one tree losing it's leaves. Where I live, trees are clear cut off of lots, then trees that aren't native to our area are planted in their place. Sad to know that we believe we know more than Mother Nature. Beautiful and powerful. Gretchen
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I take it this is about a lot more than one tree losing it's leaves. Where I live, trees are clear cut off of lots, then trees that aren't native to our area are planted in their place. Sad to know that we believe we know more than Mother Nature. Beautiful and powerful. Gretchen
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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You're absolutely right about that Gretchen. If we don't move with the rhythm of the world, we have become an invasive species. Anything that's invasion and everything else too! Yes, it's about the last tree.
And how the rest of the floor into the ocean and no more trees. Thank you so much for your review.You're very insightful! I appreciate that so much! Have an awesome day!