Marilyn found the cave
Yep! It's a cave.16 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
Jean Lafitte - For whatever reason my husband has decided to a deep dive into this very interesting pirate. Of course, he has also decided that I need to listen to all the information he's learned. Lucky me?
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
Jean Lafitte - For whatever reason my husband has decided to a deep dive into this very interesting pirate. Of course, he has also decided that I need to listen to all the information he's learned. Lucky me?
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wonderful, Karen! This is a perfect length to introduce your characters and the prospect of digging up a family fortune (except this isn't the narrator's preferred option for spending her time). It's also very humorous and real. I mean who in their right senses at Mildred's age would be interested in getting down into a dank, dark cave whatever the possible reward? This opening chapter already offers a wealth of fun and possibility, not least because she's going caving whether she likes it or not! Well done, Karen, and good luck! Debbie
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Wonderful, Karen! This is a perfect length to introduce your characters and the prospect of digging up a family fortune (except this isn't the narrator's preferred option for spending her time). It's also very humorous and real. I mean who in their right senses at Mildred's age would be interested in getting down into a dank, dark cave whatever the possible reward? This opening chapter already offers a wealth of fun and possibility, not least because she's going caving whether she likes it or not! Well done, Karen, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Neonewman
Now, this is the way you enter a contest, Karen. You left me wanting more. Did they find the treasure? Were there bats or other blind creatures down there? Did Mildred Hempstead take a nap? You can spin a couple of hundred pages off this story. Best of luck in the contest.
God bless,
Steve
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Now, this is the way you enter a contest, Karen. You left me wanting more. Did they find the treasure? Were there bats or other blind creatures down there? Did Mildred Hempstead take a nap? You can spin a couple of hundred pages off this story. Best of luck in the contest.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from marilyn quillen
very cute,I can see myself in this but after my nap, I would want the pool!
and a frozen strawberry daiquiri or 3! But your story is very delightful and flows perfectly
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very cute,I can see myself in this but after my nap, I would want the pool!
and a frozen strawberry daiquiri or 3! But your story is very delightful and flows perfectly
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I have to wonder if Jean Lafitte had smelly feet, for pirates had no showers to cleanse themselves, and as for per plunking scary caves while spelunking, I'd rather stay at home with you swooning a waltz or rattling my hips to a cha-cha, but best of all is doing the Bristol Stomp.
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I have to wonder if Jean Lafitte had smelly feet, for pirates had no showers to cleanse themselves, and as for per plunking scary caves while spelunking, I'd rather stay at home with you swooning a waltz or rattling my hips to a cha-cha, but best of all is doing the Bristol Stomp.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
My fear would have been crawling into a tight, dark space then not being able to get out!
A very different approach to this contest; instead of telling us what's in the cave, you tell us how and why you avoid it:-)
I wish you luck in this one . . . the deadline is right around the corner.
xo
Pam
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My fear would have been crawling into a tight, dark space then not being able to get out!
A very different approach to this contest; instead of telling us what's in the cave, you tell us how and why you avoid it:-)
I wish you luck in this one . . . the deadline is right around the corner.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Begin Again
I can imagine you and probably many others on FS, including Marilyn, drinking in the adventure and loving every minute of it YEARS AGO. Now, even though our heart may say go--go--go, our head says no--no--no! Take that Best Western and let someone else get lost inside that cave. Good one, Karen.
Smiles, Carol
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I can imagine you and probably many others on FS, including Marilyn, drinking in the adventure and loving every minute of it YEARS AGO. Now, even though our heart may say go--go--go, our head says no--no--no! Take that Best Western and let someone else get lost inside that cave. Good one, Karen.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from BethShelby
This is a really cute story. It is exactly the way I would feel about going in a cave at this stage of my live. I'd take the Best Western any day of the week cave hunting for treasure.
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This is a really cute story. It is exactly the way I would feel about going in a cave at this stage of my live. I'd take the Best Western any day of the week cave hunting for treasure.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from royowen
I still feel OK, but I doubt I'll take up a new career as a mountain climber, or go into the draft for the next football placement, so I don't blame you Karen, anyhow, well done with this very entertaining. Articulate narrative, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I still feel OK, but I doubt I'll take up a new career as a mountain climber, or go into the draft for the next football placement, so I don't blame you Karen, anyhow, well done with this very entertaining. Articulate narrative, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the read and nice comments. Karen
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Well done
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:-)
Comment from lyenochka
Hear, hear! Yes, not cave spelunking for women who want to keep alive and healthy in their -ahem- older years. Good for Mildred for choosing wisely. Hope Marilyn sees this one! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Hear, hear! Yes, not cave spelunking for women who want to keep alive and healthy in their -ahem- older years. Good for Mildred for choosing wisely. Hope Marilyn sees this one! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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When I was younger, I would have put on my waders and gone. But those years are gone. I can watch with rapt attention from afar., under my heated blanket. Thanks for the read. Karen