Dodie Rae
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Darkness"A young woman unwilling to submit to abuse.
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Comment from Jim Wile
So, Bay Lynn seems to have had the blood lust awakened in her from recent events and she's now taking up the mantle of attacking abusers from her jailed granddaughter. What a powerful trigger that is for them.
I wonder if Dodie Rae will be pleased by this or a little regretful that she wasn't the one to get her revenge against Riley? Also, with her chief antagonist gone, can anything stop them now that they are clearly on the warpath together? You're keeping us glued to the story, Steve.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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So, Bay Lynn seems to have had the blood lust awakened in her from recent events and she's now taking up the mantle of attacking abusers from her jailed granddaughter. What a powerful trigger that is for them.
I wonder if Dodie Rae will be pleased by this or a little regretful that she wasn't the one to get her revenge against Riley? Also, with her chief antagonist gone, can anything stop them now that they are clearly on the warpath together? You're keeping us glued to the story, Steve.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jim, for the incredible review. I don't think Dodie Rae will be happy about the Bay Lynn taking Riley out. I do believe it will have the police looking in another direction.
I would love to have more time to write this story and many others. One day, I suppose, lol.
God bless,
Steve
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I understand where you're coming from. I don't think I could have spent much time writing when I was your age and working. It was only after I retired that I began writing fiction with my first work, which was a golf novella called Lucky Eddie that I wrote in 2016 and posted on FanStory in 2023. In fact my first 5 novels were all golf novels, and only the last two have not been.
All of the golf novels are related, featuring many of the same characters, one of whom also appeared in What We See.
We will likely see a few of them in the sequel to Duel with the Devil when I get around to writing that. I'm taking a bit of a break before starting that one.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh wow, Steve! I've been holding my breath throughout this! You certainly know how to raise the bar on horror. There's the suspense before the attack, then the blood-thirsty assault, followed by May's efforts to save his life. As if our blood pressure isn't raised enough, you then add still more tension with the police car potentially pulling in Bay Lynn. I would doubt Riley's going to make it now...
Just one small edit: May(,) I need you to calm down...
Excellent horror of which Mr King would approve! Well done Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Oh wow, Steve! I've been holding my breath throughout this! You certainly know how to raise the bar on horror. There's the suspense before the attack, then the blood-thirsty assault, followed by May's efforts to save his life. As if our blood pressure isn't raised enough, you then add still more tension with the police car potentially pulling in Bay Lynn. I would doubt Riley's going to make it now...
Just one small edit: May(,) I need you to calm down...
Excellent horror of which Mr King would approve! Well done Debbie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thank you for this excellent, helpful review, Debbie. I have enjoyed writing this novel and am only a third of the way through it, lol. I wish I had all the time I needed to work on it daily. Work takes too much of my time.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, that's one butthole out of the way. LOL. You'll have to excuse me, I've most always been for the Indians, and the bank robbers; so, I assuredly have to be for the werewolf. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Well, that's one butthole out of the way. LOL. You'll have to excuse me, I've most always been for the Indians, and the bank robbers; so, I assuredly have to be for the werewolf. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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I'm right there with you, Ric. Thank you for this exceptional review, my friend. I appreciate your continued support.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from GWHARGIS
Thank goodness you posted before I had given away all of my sixes. I really lliked this chapter. I was amazed that Bae Lynn jumped in on the action. For a second, I thought that maybe Officer Riley was the victim of domestic abuse from his wife. Did I miss that or make it up in my own imagination. Now, if that is the case, Bae Lynn has made a terrible mistake. really good chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank goodness you posted before I had given away all of my sixes. I really lliked this chapter. I was amazed that Bae Lynn jumped in on the action. For a second, I thought that maybe Officer Riley was the victim of domestic abuse from his wife. Did I miss that or make it up in my own imagination. Now, if that is the case, Bae Lynn has made a terrible mistake. really good chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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It does appear that Riley may be a victim of abuse, as May seems to be the dominant of the two. This opens the story up to multiple scenarios. Does Bay Lynn realize he may be an innocent victim? We'll have to see what happens, lol. I don't seem to find your last post for Detour. Did I miss it? Thank you, Gretchen, for the exceptional review, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
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I miss named it. You did leave me a review. lol. You are all caught up until next Sunday.
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Awesome!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A good part of being a werewolf is the strength and self healing.... it's so satisfying. Your book is moving along well. The plot and characters are well developed.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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A good part of being a werewolf is the strength and self healing.... it's so satisfying. Your book is moving along well. The plot and characters are well developed.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy, for this excellent review. There are many things to come in the future, crazy things. I'm looking forward to getting them on paper.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Jacob1395
This was another intense chapter, Steve, and you really kept me gripped. I loved your description, particularly here, "Her molten eyes shone like most creatures of the night." This was so well done, and it really made me feel as though I was there as part of the action. Another excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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This was another intense chapter, Steve, and you really kept me gripped. I loved your description, particularly here, "Her molten eyes shone like most creatures of the night." This was so well done, and it really made me feel as though I was there as part of the action. Another excellent chapter.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jacob, for this incredible review, my friend. What a great compliment this review is for me. I love that you're immersed in the chapter and enjoy the story.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from royowen
Perhaps Bay Lynn has made a sad mistake, tacking Officer Riley like that may not be the answer to why she tackled him, it may be May who is the problem here, some men are bashed by their wives. Now we're getting into the nitty gritty, beautifully written dear friend Steve, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Perhaps Bay Lynn has made a sad mistake, tacking Officer Riley like that may not be the answer to why she tackled him, it may be May who is the problem here, some men are bashed by their wives. Now we're getting into the nitty gritty, beautifully written dear friend Steve, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Roy, for this incredible review, my friend. Yes, it appears May is the problem. Abuse is prevalent in both genders, as well as all races.
God bless,
Steve
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Yep I thought so
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This post makes me wonder if Riley wasn't the abuser, but his wife was. That's an interesting twist. Also is Carey and Riley's wife having an affair. I have questions. I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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This post makes me wonder if Riley wasn't the abuser, but his wife was. That's an interesting twist. Also is Carey and Riley's wife having an affair. I have questions. I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Barbara, for this excellent review, my friend. It appears May, might be the issue here, as her terms of endearment towards Riley are not normal. Abuse is not gender specific by any means. We'll see what the next chapter brings.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Well, that explains stuff, He was an abused husband.What a wonderful twist. That's why he could not process that a man could hurt a woman. Amazing. You are simply divine. Now Bay Lynn and Dodie need to leave. Dodie was locked up so they will release her. And, The menfolk have been suffciently chastened for a while. And with a abused husband attacked they will no longer thinks abused wives are involved. What a glorious big brain you have. :-)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Well, that explains stuff, He was an abused husband.What a wonderful twist. That's why he could not process that a man could hurt a woman. Amazing. You are simply divine. Now Bay Lynn and Dodie need to leave. Dodie was locked up so they will release her. And, The menfolk have been suffciently chastened for a while. And with a abused husband attacked they will no longer thinks abused wives are involved. What a glorious big brain you have. :-)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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This is by far, my favorite review for this story. Thank you for boosting my enthusiasm and giving me the desire to get up this early to continue writing. I loved this chapter, and had it set for the end of the book. Obviously I couldn't wait, lol. It opened up a plethora of ideas and I can't wait to share them.
God bless,
Steve
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I will go read my friend. What does Momma think of this story?
Karen
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She loves it and asked me how I think up this stuff. I told her it was like watching a movie inside my head and the characters tell me what to say. Her response was priceless. "You hear voices in your head?"
That cracked me up. I told her no, not like that.
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If she is driving, and you see hospitals in the distance..........
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LOL!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Woohooo Finally! lol One cop down, many more to go. Very satisfying after waiting for this guy to bite it. It seems Bay Lynn is really feeling her oats with the resurgence of her beast. I hope it doesn't get them caught. Great chapter.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Woohooo Finally! lol One cop down, many more to go. Very satisfying after waiting for this guy to bite it. It seems Bay Lynn is really feeling her oats with the resurgence of her beast. I hope it doesn't get them caught. Great chapter.
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn, for this incredible review, my friend. I enjoyed this chapter and the twist it presented. It opened up a whole new avenue I hadn't expected.
God bless,
Steve
