Pieces
A dark sonnet9 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Dark Sonnet writing prompt. You did a very good job on your sonnet. Your syllable count and rhyme were all within guidelines as was the poems topic. You meter sounded good to me but I am still learning myself so am not in the position to judge yours. Loved the story line and especially the final line.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the Dark Sonnet writing prompt. You did a very good job on your sonnet. Your syllable count and rhyme were all within guidelines as was the poems topic. You meter sounded good to me but I am still learning myself so am not in the position to judge yours. Loved the story line and especially the final line.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much, Marilyn!! Xo
Comment from royowen
I honestly wonder how many murders have been committed, Crime de passionale, I believe there was a law in France that one could commit a murder like this and get away with, not sure about now though, a beautifully written sonnet Jennifer, an excellent post, good luck, blessings Roy
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I honestly wonder how many murders have been committed, Crime de passionale, I believe there was a law in France that one could commit a murder like this and get away with, not sure about now though, a beautifully written sonnet Jennifer, an excellent post, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Hi Jessica,
I must echo SimianSavant's comment in that this poem indeed deserves more credit than it got. Beautifully constructed within the form it tells a dark tale of betrayal, murder and revenge. The image matches superbly. Very creepy. Excellent writing. Well done x
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Hi Jessica,
I must echo SimianSavant's comment in that this poem indeed deserves more credit than it got. Beautifully constructed within the form it tells a dark tale of betrayal, murder and revenge. The image matches superbly. Very creepy. Excellent writing. Well done x
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from SimianSavant
Brilliant rhyme with *kissed her* and *sister*. I don't know why so few votes were cast in this contest, and your entry deserves more credit than it got. There is a strong, clear narrative with no fluff words in this sonnet, and it boils to a devastating finish. Nicely done.
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Brilliant rhyme with *kissed her* and *sister*. I don't know why so few votes were cast in this contest, and your entry deserves more credit than it got. There is a strong, clear narrative with no fluff words in this sonnet, and it boils to a devastating finish. Nicely done.
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Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, Pieces, has the proper formatting and truly takes the dark route to the passion killing, dismembering, and disposing of the grisly remains. Nice.
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This sonnet, Pieces, has the proper formatting and truly takes the dark route to the passion killing, dismembering, and disposing of the grisly remains. Nice.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Joe Streiff
Wow! This is dark and in a subtle way very funny. Poetry usually bores me, but this made me giggle. It has a very elegant writing style, usually used in the opposite, in romance. Which makes the whole thing resonate even more. Plus it caters to the sense of justice. Serves them right was my thought after the giggles had died out. Thanks for this poem, it made my evening!
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Wow! This is dark and in a subtle way very funny. Poetry usually bores me, but this made me giggle. It has a very elegant writing style, usually used in the opposite, in romance. Which makes the whole thing resonate even more. Plus it caters to the sense of justice. Serves them right was my thought after the giggles had died out. Thanks for this poem, it made my evening!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from ESOSTINE
What a very poignant poem, a horror where blood and death is the call of vengeful anger. Well done, dear. Thanks for sharing your inspiration, and good luck in the contest.
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What a very poignant poem, a horror where blood and death is the call of vengeful anger. Well done, dear. Thanks for sharing your inspiration, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Nicki.B
This is an excellent dark sonnet and a great entry of the prompt. You tell the story with beautiful technique,the sonnet is a style I've not yet been able to master. Well done
Best Wishes
Nicki
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This is an excellent dark sonnet and a great entry of the prompt. You tell the story with beautiful technique,the sonnet is a style I've not yet been able to master. Well done
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Begin Again
Now that's an evil one! She felt the pain and allowed it to turn to the darest of rage and murdered them both, hiding them never to be seen again. Gave me the creeps which it was meant to do.
Smiles, Carol
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Now that's an evil one! She felt the pain and allowed it to turn to the darest of rage and murdered them both, hiding them never to be seen again. Gave me the creeps which it was meant to do.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024