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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "End of the Road "Two very real women in not so real situation.
19 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
"The Sea Air is laced with diesel and expensive cologne." What a powerful piece of description, Gretchen. I could actually smell it, lol. I don't know how anyone could stand being around some one like Jane. I deal with some at work, but not on this level. I can't wait to see what happens at the convention.
God bless,
Steve
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"The Sea Air is laced with diesel and expensive cologne." What a powerful piece of description, Gretchen. I could actually smell it, lol. I don't know how anyone could stand being around some one like Jane. I deal with some at work, but not on this level. I can't wait to see what happens at the convention.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
Comment from patcelaw
I very much enjoyed listening to this chapter and I wish you the very best along with your coat. Writer presented this book in a wonderful way. May you have a blessed week and may God give you all of your desires. Patricia
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I very much enjoyed listening to this chapter and I wish you the very best along with your coat. Writer presented this book in a wonderful way. May you have a blessed week and may God give you all of your desires. Patricia
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hahaha... I love your good humor. I love the seashore and it's sad that Atlanta city's beaches smell so bad. What a waste.
Excellent chapter. I'm looking forward to the fanstory convention.
Well done!
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Hahaha... I love your good humor. I love the seashore and it's sad that Atlanta city's beaches smell so bad. What a waste.
Excellent chapter. I'm looking forward to the fanstory convention.
Well done!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I couldn't help but smile and giggle as I read this addition. You did a great job writing this section. I really like this story and can't wait to read more. I do hope Jane finds others to harass.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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I couldn't help but smile and giggle as I read this addition. You did a great job writing this section. I really like this story and can't wait to read more. I do hope Jane finds others to harass.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Who knows, Barbara, she may meet up with you at the convention. Lol. Rachelle and I plan on running into a few members of Fanstory at the convention. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from pome lover
Gretchen, you are so funny. One minute you sound so sweet and shiny, the next, welcome to the real world. I'm afraid I'm with Rachelle. I don't see how ya'll have stood her this long. I say I'm with RAchelle, but I don't have the ability to say to Jane what she said, however I was cheering her on. And you came through at the end like a champ. That was a good one! I know you're thrilled that I think so. :)
Great chapter.
Am really curious to see where it goes from here. What a challenge. Looking forward to it,
Katharine
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Gretchen, you are so funny. One minute you sound so sweet and shiny, the next, welcome to the real world. I'm afraid I'm with Rachelle. I don't see how ya'll have stood her this long. I say I'm with RAchelle, but I don't have the ability to say to Jane what she said, however I was cheering her on. And you came through at the end like a champ. That was a good one! I know you're thrilled that I think so. :)
Great chapter.
Am really curious to see where it goes from here. What a challenge. Looking forward to it,
Katharine
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Always love your reviews. I'm glad you enjoyed this. As far as my personality goes, I'm nice until I'm not. Lol. Gretchen
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yeah.me, too.
Comment from Sankey
This was good. Is it the end of the story or what? Sounds funny for a bunch of strange girls. Thanks for the trip.
Looking forward to where you are going, soon.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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This was good. Is it the end of the story or what? Sounds funny for a bunch of strange girls. Thanks for the trip.
Looking forward to where you are going, soon.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Getting close to the end but not there yet. Couple more chapters. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Gretchen.
I remember Jane and what a lovely person she is. However, my favorite sentence in the story is, "The Sea Air is laced with diesel and expensive cologne." I cracked up when I read that one. I love reading poetry and prose while I look for the outstanding phrases or sentences that cause the story to stand out in my mind. That is a dandy one. This chapter is well done, and caused me to laugh out loud as I read it. Good job.
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Hello Gretchen.
I remember Jane and what a lovely person she is. However, my favorite sentence in the story is, "The Sea Air is laced with diesel and expensive cologne." I cracked up when I read that one. I love reading poetry and prose while I look for the outstanding phrases or sentences that cause the story to stand out in my mind. That is a dandy one. This chapter is well done, and caused me to laugh out loud as I read it. Good job.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you got a chuckle out of this. Gretchen
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm really enjoying your road trip, but that's because I don't have to ride with Jane in the back seat. I couldn't wait for you to get to Atlantic City. I spent my life just across the bridge in Philadelphia. Every summer my husband and I spent a week in Atlantic City. On the road leading into the city are large billboards advertising casinos, shows, and restaurants, just as you described. And the sea air opens your nasal passages.
I'm looking forward to descriptions of the convention, probably at the Convention Center. This story idea is great fun.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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I'm really enjoying your road trip, but that's because I don't have to ride with Jane in the back seat. I couldn't wait for you to get to Atlantic City. I spent my life just across the bridge in Philadelphia. Every summer my husband and I spent a week in Atlantic City. On the road leading into the city are large billboards advertising casinos, shows, and restaurants, just as you described. And the sea air opens your nasal passages.
I'm looking forward to descriptions of the convention, probably at the Convention Center. This story idea is great fun.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad we finally made it. Hopefully I'll see you there. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is amusing and I hope there is more. Surely Jane is going to spend her time trying to embarrass the two of you or getting herself into trouble that you end up feeling you have to save her from.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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This is amusing and I hope there is more. Surely Jane is going to spend her time trying to embarrass the two of you or getting herself into trouble that you end up feeling you have to save her from.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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You know Jane is going to try to one up this low down Dixie chick. Lol. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is so sweet of Rachelle to stick up for you like this and Jane deserves to weep. Your kindness towards her has been ignored and an outsider can see who the bigger person is here Gretchen and Jane is last in the pecking order. I loved your metaphors and your delivery is always skilful and talented when you write. I have enjoyed this project as the two of you have delighted us with your skilled posts, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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It is so sweet of Rachelle to stick up for you like this and Jane deserves to weep. Your kindness towards her has been ignored and an outsider can see who the bigger person is here Gretchen and Jane is last in the pecking order. I loved your metaphors and your delivery is always skilful and talented when you write. I have enjoyed this project as the two of you have delighted us with your skilled posts, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. I'm sure I'll "see" you there. I'm glad you are enjoying this. Gretchen