Mary Had A Little Lamb
A rewrite of an old gem5 total reviews
Comment from Cullen T. Bridges
The rhyme scheme, the dialect, and the bit of humor make this a wonderfully reimagined nursery rhyme that adds so much character to such a simple tune. Admittedly, I do think it is a bit drawn out, but I don't think that's enough to fully detract from the thought that went into this well-written work. Wonderful job!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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The rhyme scheme, the dialect, and the bit of humor make this a wonderfully reimagined nursery rhyme that adds so much character to such a simple tune. Admittedly, I do think it is a bit drawn out, but I don't think that's enough to fully detract from the thought that went into this well-written work. Wonderful job!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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What a great Christian name, it's my surname. I still remember being addressed by that name, IN ANGER by those old Marist Brothers. It went something like this. "Get out here, Cullen."
It still triggers fear, and pain. Generally, it preceded pain, and a series of sex savagely administered collisions between my hands and their deliverer of justice, a four-foot CANE. Those memories still inflict significant distress. I think I need a lawyer.
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What a great Christian name, it's my surname. I still remember being addressed by that name, IN ANGER by those old Marist Brothers. It went something like this. "Get out here, Cullen."
It still triggers fear, and pain. Generally, it preceded pain, and a series of six savagely administered collisions between my hands and their deliverer of justice, a four-foot CANE. Those memories still inflict significant emotional distress. I think I need a lawyer.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I love how you shared such heartfelt story. The playful moment at the dance with the cha-cha was so sweet. The storytelling was fantastic in such a unique format. You've got such a natural flow here, and I really enjoyed the journey through the memories. Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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I love how you shared such heartfelt story. The playful moment at the dance with the cha-cha was so sweet. The storytelling was fantastic in such a unique format. You've got such a natural flow here, and I really enjoyed the journey through the memories. Beautifully done!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Your review is too kind. Compliments are so much easier to handle than criticism. My h.ead swelled dramatically after reading your comment. Thank you so much
Comment from lyenochka
I see this is an interesting acrostic poem which in the first column reads with some letter omissions:
Mary had a little lamb [litt] le lamb but there is so much more to the story [the]re's a lot more to the tale.
And your poem seems to be less about Mary and maybe more about people owning things and not giving God credit for owning everything.
I always thought Mary was quite the carnivore and she had a little lamb, a little ham, a little beef...
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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I see this is an interesting acrostic poem which in the first column reads with some letter omissions:
Mary had a little lamb [litt] le lamb but there is so much more to the story [the]re's a lot more to the tale.
And your poem seems to be less about Mary and maybe more about people owning things and not giving God credit for owning everything.
I always thought Mary was quite the carnivore and she had a little lamb, a little ham, a little beef...
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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I must apologise, there was a gigantic stuff up in this posting. I'm now attempting to locate where I lodged the original work. Too much wine does terrible things to my postings.
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okay. thanks for explaining.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I suspect if I study this piece long enough I might decode what the singular column on the right might say, but there are other reviews to do, so if you want me to be in the know, show me the answer please.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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I suspect if I study this piece long enough I might decode what the singular column on the right might say, but there are other reviews to do, so if you want me to be in the know, show me the answer please.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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They were just idiot notes of the writer planning possible revisions. Please ignore this incompitent's scribblings
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They were just idiot notes of the writer planning possible revisions. Please ignore this incompitent's scribblings
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Are you still constructing this poem Bob? I'll come back and read it properly as it sounds like a humorous poem full of clever rhymes, love Dolly x x x x
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Are you still constructing this poem Bob? I'll come back and read it properly as it sounds like a humorous poem full of clever rhymes, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Sorry Dolly, I was scribbling possible revisions prior to posting. I just stuffed up. I'll fix it up in the next five, Apologies, Bob,
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Sorry Dolly, I was scribbling possible revisions prior to posting. I just stuffed up. I'll fix it up in the next five, Apologies, Bob,
