when worlds collide
halloween bad craziness4 total reviews
Comment from TPAC
Wow! What a list. I wonder why you repeated succubae, succubae: twice. I got a kick out of these mysterious beings: even trump. A good laugh for me, detailing the many night horrors. Not great: but appealing to my interests.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Wow! What a list. I wonder why you repeated succubae, succubae: twice. I got a kick out of these mysterious beings: even trump. A good laugh for me, detailing the many night horrors. Not great: but appealing to my interests.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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thanks a lot
Comment from SimianSavant
What is this, just a trigger list of your childhood traumas packed with sloppy grammar? Come on, you can do better than this. It's supposed to be a STORY. I also resent that you listed King Kong as a villain, at the same level as Satan and leprechauns. In its current form this is stupid, not even funny for a Democrat to read. You could easily take some of these things on your list and make it hilarious though. Message back if you revise and I will re-review.
Regards,
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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What is this, just a trigger list of your childhood traumas packed with sloppy grammar? Come on, you can do better than this. It's supposed to be a STORY. I also resent that you listed King Kong as a villain, at the same level as Satan and leprechauns. In its current form this is stupid, not even funny for a Democrat to read. You could easily take some of these things on your list and make it hilarious though. Message back if you revise and I will re-review.
Regards,
🦍
Comment Written 11-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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thanks I will review it and repost it
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Let me know when you do, because I don't like leaving writers with a 2!
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oh I will do that soon
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I would recommend vasty reducing that long list of characters or costumes and focus more on the elements of a story. The contest is for a story.
notes:
The spirit world, and our normal worlds collide for a night of bad craziness.
-suggestion-
The spirit world, and our physical world collide for a night of bad craziness.
aliens. apes, banshees, bats,
-Aliens, apes, banshees, bats,
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Hmm, I would recommend vasty reducing that long list of characters or costumes and focus more on the elements of a story. The contest is for a story.
notes:
The spirit world, and our normal worlds collide for a night of bad craziness.
-suggestion-
The spirit world, and our physical world collide for a night of bad craziness.
aliens. apes, banshees, bats,
-Aliens, apes, banshees, bats,
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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thanks good comments
Comment from Kahlani
Oooh, what a crazy night of horror. I think you have named just about every dangerous spirit/monster imaginable. An enjoyable read, but I hope I don't have nightmares.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Oooh, what a crazy night of horror. I think you have named just about every dangerous spirit/monster imaginable. An enjoyable read, but I hope I don't have nightmares.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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thanks a lot