Truckin
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Comment from Jim Wile
Very interesting hearing a truck driver's take on the truck killer. He seems to understand Clyde's motivation and even posed the key question to his son: What would you do if a truck driver hurt or killed your sister or mother? He's inside Clyde's head and understands him. A confrontation between these two would be very interesting.
More good knowledge about how trucking works. You've certainly done your research, Wayne.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Very interesting hearing a truck driver's take on the truck killer. He seems to understand Clyde's motivation and even posed the key question to his son: What would you do if a truck driver hurt or killed your sister or mother? He's inside Clyde's head and understands him. A confrontation between these two would be very interesting.
More good knowledge about how trucking works. You've certainly done your research, Wayne.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you. It was only right that I show most truckers to be humans, good people.
Comment from Wendy G
Oh dear, that last sentence is ominous. I enjoyed this, seeing the impact on another human being and his very real family concerns. We all know that kids miss their fathers when they're away working, but for a coach to choose kids to play the whole match because their fathers are watching - that's an impact one doesn't consider. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Oh dear, that last sentence is ominous. I enjoyed this, seeing the impact on another human being and his very real family concerns. We all know that kids miss their fathers when they're away working, but for a coach to choose kids to play the whole match because their fathers are watching - that's an impact one doesn't consider. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Kids sports in America can be hideously unfair. In higher grades and with older kids, I perfectly understand coaches' wanting to win and developing talented kids. What school band leader would put a bad player in the number one chair?
But for the little kids: they come to practice, then they should get to play in a game, even if only a part of the game.
Maybe I'll write a book about a parent on the warpath! (smiley face here)
Thank you for your great review!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I can understand the wife of a cop being anxious about their spouse going off to work each day, but driving something like these trucks is probably dangerous in its own way. Never thought about it before.
I strongly recommend dialogue tags. We're reading a lot of Thurmon's dialogue with his wife, then she begins to speak. It can be a little confusing at first, and tags are always appreciated for clarity.
Oh, dear, this sounds foreboding. We'll see what awaits Thurmon.
See you in a few days, Wayne.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I can understand the wife of a cop being anxious about their spouse going off to work each day, but driving something like these trucks is probably dangerous in its own way. Never thought about it before.
I strongly recommend dialogue tags. We're reading a lot of Thurmon's dialogue with his wife, then she begins to speak. It can be a little confusing at first, and tags are always appreciated for clarity.
Oh, dear, this sounds foreboding. We'll see what awaits Thurmon.
See you in a few days, Wayne.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you.
Dialogue tags are sometimes tricky. I think they are over done sometimes, but on other occasions, I get so wrapped up in the exchange that what is obvious to me, even during editing, may not be so to readers.
Comment from lyenochka
I really like how you make the reader feel sympathy both for the trucker, Thurman, and the bad truck driving avenger, Clyde. The more we learn about Thurman and his hard life being away from his family, we hope that Clyde will get to know him personally.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I really like how you make the reader feel sympathy both for the trucker, Thurman, and the bad truck driving avenger, Clyde. The more we learn about Thurman and his hard life being away from his family, we hope that Clyde will get to know him personally.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I believe most truckers are good and decent people, very much concerned with professionalism and courtesy. But if only 5-10% are selfish bullies, and if even well-meaning truckers goof up 1-2% of the time, that's a lot of negative encounters.
Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You did a good job writing it from the trucker's point of view. My grandson wants to be home with his wife and nine-month-old daughter, but the pay is very good and means he can buy them a nice house sooner. Thermon feels guilty about the same things as my grandson.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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You did a good job writing it from the trucker's point of view. My grandson wants to be home with his wife and nine-month-old daughter, but the pay is very good and means he can buy them a nice house sooner. Thermon feels guilty about the same things as my grandson.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your great review.
I believe that most truckers are really good people and skilled drivers. I don't like that too many are governed at 67-68 mph, that there aren't enough truck rest stops, that some companies don't maintain their vehicles well enough, and that some companies don't invest enough in training.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
He is in real danger of loosing his marbles entirely. His grip on reality is paper thin. Car and truck drivers, and bus drivers, don't have plenty of rude and agressive people? Drunks? What bad habits does he have that others might find offensive ? He is sacrificing the family and friends he has left to mollify his own ego. His wife certainly would not want this. My opinion only. :-)
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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He is in real danger of loosing his marbles entirely. His grip on reality is paper thin. Car and truck drivers, and bus drivers, don't have plenty of rude and agressive people? Drunks? What bad habits does he have that others might find offensive ? He is sacrificing the family and friends he has left to mollify his own ego. His wife certainly would not want this. My opinion only. :-)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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As right as you may be. He has only his own perspective, and his own loss. He would leave others to fight their own battles. Yes, others are bad, and maybe worse. Clyde is crazy, and on a Geronimo rampage. No one could have talked Geronimo down.
Thank you for your passion.
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Comment from jim vecchio
Your story is really trucking along! I have a suggestion. I could not write this continuing story as well as you, but I was thinking, it's near Election time. Rmember last election? You said mail truck rarely go a day away. Perhaps Clyde could come into contact with a mail truck carrying votes and attempting to destroy them.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Your story is really trucking along! I have a suggestion. I could not write this continuing story as well as you, but I was thinking, it's near Election time. Rmember last election? You said mail truck rarely go a day away. Perhaps Clyde could come into contact with a mail truck carrying votes and attempting to destroy them.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Hmmmmm
Interesting idea. Thanks.
And thank you for thee great review.
AND especially or the six stars!
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You deserve it!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Trucking is a tough life on a family man. Heck, what am I talking about, it's a tough job period for the OTR drivers who are sometimes gone for weeks at a time. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Trucking is a tough life on a family man. Heck, what am I talking about, it's a tough job period for the OTR drivers who are sometimes gone for weeks at a time. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank YOU for your great review and for the six stars!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed this chapter! Thurmon's character feels so real. The little details like his conversations with Sara really bring him to life. I liked how you showed his internal struggle and the weariness that comes with his profession. The family moments were heartwarming - especially his conversations with Nate. Great work!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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I really enjoyed this chapter! Thurmon's character feels so real. The little details like his conversations with Sara really bring him to life. I liked how you showed his internal struggle and the weariness that comes with his profession. The family moments were heartwarming - especially his conversations with Nate. Great work!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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I felt the need to humanize truckers.
Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Kahlani
This is another riveting chapter full of action and drama. I really appreciate how you get inside Thurmon's head so that the reader can feel and see what he does. Thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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This is another riveting chapter full of action and drama. I really appreciate how you get inside Thurmon's head so that the reader can feel and see what he does. Thank you.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your great review.
I couldn't just vilify truckers when there so many good ones (prob'ly most truckers are good drivers).