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Tales of our Times

Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "To Let"
Collection of short stories

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Comment from Esther Brown
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Escape from your siblings doesn't bode well for a reason for shacking up...those hormones always make it seem like a good idea. Very well done. Good luck. Esther

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
Comment from F. William Lester
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A point well taken. Love is a partnership and untended it loses its connection. If only they developed something they could do together beyond cohabitation. Nice work; well written. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
reply by F. William Lester on 09-Oct-2024
    You're very welcome.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Hahaha. Yeah, indulging in solitary past times while "being together" seems like the perfect recipe for failure.

Well done, Mystery Contestant! Good luck in tge polls. Xo

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from Sugarray77
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Hello. You did a great job with developing this story for the Good Idea contest. The truth imbedded in your write showcases the selfishness of each of them. A funny and predictable result. Good luck.

Melissa

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from Wendy G
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A relationship needs a bit of togetherness ... and it seems that the "good idea" was in fact their undoing. It's when you live together that you really see what the other is like, and apparently they were using their new accommodation only to be free to indulge in their own self-centred pursuits. Well written. Best wishes.
Wendy

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This is a story about reality. You never know how something is going to turn out until you try it. Cath and John saw an opportunity to spend time together. To their surprise, it was also an opportunity to get away from annoyances at home. A great short story. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
Comment from jessizero
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This was a great little one hundred word piece for the contest. I think you did a great job with the prompt. I liked the last line. It was the perfect way to end the story. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from Nicki.B
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Oh I love this story or escapism for young individuals for reasons that are understandable for people that age and then of course the moving on as it as a short spell of lust and convenience.
Great story fornthe prompt, best of luck!
Nicki

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Great review zanya
Comment from Kahlani
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It's short and sweet--just like their relationship. It's a good message not to rush into things. Take your time and let things simmer. Your story is concise and entertaining.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2024
    Great opening line - thanks for sharing zanya