A Fishy Tale
Attic entry for the Picture This club12 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
Oh my goodness, Jim, this should have been entered in the "Share a Story in a Poem" contest. No one tells a tale (in this case, a fishtail) better than you do, and it's nice to see you do in poetry what you usually do in prose. This tale is simultaneously funny and sad, and consistently interesting. I enjoyed reading it, and am amazed that you were able to get such a multi-tiered story out of a simple "The Attic - what secrets are hidden here" prompt. Excellent job!
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Oh my goodness, Jim, this should have been entered in the "Share a Story in a Poem" contest. No one tells a tale (in this case, a fishtail) better than you do, and it's nice to see you do in poetry what you usually do in prose. This tale is simultaneously funny and sad, and consistently interesting. I enjoyed reading it, and am amazed that you were able to get such a multi-tiered story out of a simple "The Attic - what secrets are hidden here" prompt. Excellent job!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done tale about fishermen lost at sea. So many sailors and fishermen had lost their lives at sea over the years, you captured the horror and the feeling of being lost at sea in this poem
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nicely done tale about fishermen lost at sea. So many sailors and fishermen had lost their lives at sea over the years, you captured the horror and the feeling of being lost at sea in this poem
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from DonandVicki
A rhyming fish/ tale, well composed and a delight to read. I like the image and the media that you used to enhance the words and visuals that I saw reading you fun poem.
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A rhyming fish/ tale, well composed and a delight to read. I like the image and the media that you used to enhance the words and visuals that I saw reading you fun poem.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jim
This is a well told story of seamen who had a bad few days. Ha Ha. It is witty and its rhyming couplets make the story go as quickly as their lives.
I would think that haddock would smell up the whole house, not just the attic.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good entry for the club.
Enjoy the rest of your weekend
Joan
P S If I haven't told you yet I have just published a book titled 'The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry' by Joan Pechter. It is available on Amazon.com. If I told you, I am sorry for the repetition.
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Hi Jim
This is a well told story of seamen who had a bad few days. Ha Ha. It is witty and its rhyming couplets make the story go as quickly as their lives.
I would think that haddock would smell up the whole house, not just the attic.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good entry for the club.
Enjoy the rest of your weekend
Joan
P S If I haven't told you yet I have just published a book titled 'The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry' by Joan Pechter. It is available on Amazon.com. If I told you, I am sorry for the repetition.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from BethShelby
This is a fishy tale. I think a rotten fish in the attic wouldn't be a very healthy memento and I'm not usre a stuffed tomato would be enough after being without food so long. You pome rhymes and was fun to read.
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This is a fishy tale. I think a rotten fish in the attic wouldn't be a very healthy memento and I'm not usre a stuffed tomato would be enough after being without food so long. You pome rhymes and was fun to read.
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
LOL That was the Ballad of the Haddock! I think we should put it to music! We can use an old sea shanty as the melody. I will get right on it! Great tale done in poem form.
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LOL That was the Ballad of the Haddock! I think we should put it to music! We can use an old sea shanty as the melody. I will get right on it! Great tale done in poem form.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A isn't tale indeed Jim and fish left for a while smells awful and it is best to eat fish when it is fresh! You poem darted about somewhat and I found myself a bit confused by the end of your poem, I was swimming with the fishes, love Dolly x
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A isn't tale indeed Jim and fish left for a while smells awful and it is best to eat fish when it is fresh! You poem darted about somewhat and I found myself a bit confused by the end of your poem, I was swimming with the fishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
What an unusual tale of a group of fifteen men who couldn't figure out how to survive on a fishing trip. Only one man who hadn't eaten in days, left the boat alive and was able to ultimately get hold of a tomato to eat. As gruesome as the story is, it has a smelly, but happy ending. Great entry for the club.
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What an unusual tale of a group of fifteen men who couldn't figure out how to survive on a fishing trip. Only one man who hadn't eaten in days, left the boat alive and was able to ultimately get hold of a tomato to eat. As gruesome as the story is, it has a smelly, but happy ending. Great entry for the club.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
What an imagination. I have the ten little Indian story many times. You did it justice. Tongue in cheek works well for you. But tell me frind, why does the fish still stink? Karen
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What an imagination. I have the ten little Indian story many times. You did it justice. Tongue in cheek works well for you. But tell me frind, why does the fish still stink? Karen
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So much violence on this fishing trip. I guess this story/poem had a good ending. I'm curious why didn't they fish instead of killing each other. I guess maybe I missed something. Thank you for sharing.
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So much violence on this fishing trip. I guess this story/poem had a good ending. I'm curious why didn't they fish instead of killing each other. I guess maybe I missed something. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024