Snow Flakes
Limerick27 total reviews
Comment from gansach
Limericks are not as easy to do as they look. They've got that specific meter that gives them their punch. With that said, I think you did a pretty good job for a first try. If you can, read Marilyn Hamilton's limericks. She's got it nailed, especially the punchline humor. And keep trying, practice makes perfect. Nice job!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Limericks are not as easy to do as they look. They've got that specific meter that gives them their punch. With that said, I think you did a pretty good job for a first try. If you can, read Marilyn Hamilton's limericks. She's got it nailed, especially the punchline humor. And keep trying, practice makes perfect. Nice job!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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I know I really struggled for a week .I went to Marilyn Hamilton 's profile and read some of her limericks..Thanks for dropping .
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Haha! I used to live in New England, and I remember how watching the snow fall was so beautiful until we had to head out with shovels!
"and they descend in dancing delight" - would "as they descend" sound better and follow the first line better? Just a thought.
Marilyn Hamilton is another very good Limerick writer for you to check out if you haven't already.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Haha! I used to live in New England, and I remember how watching the snow fall was so beautiful until we had to head out with shovels!
"and they descend in dancing delight" - would "as they descend" sound better and follow the first line better? Just a thought.
Marilyn Hamilton is another very good Limerick writer for you to check out if you haven't already.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much .You are right .I made the change.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
You did a great job trying out a limerick. Glad you joined us on our limerick-thon lol check out our Halloween ones. We are having a blast. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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You did a great job trying out a limerick. Glad you joined us on our limerick-thon lol check out our Halloween ones. We are having a blast. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much .I went to your profile and read some of your limericks.IT was suggested to me by two reviewers .Theyare so funny .I dont think I can write like that I struggled with this for a week .I will try one more...Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from Janet Foor
You did great with your limerick. Fun and funny with a perfect picture to complement your poem.
Well done. Maybe you should write another.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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You did great with your limerick. Fun and funny with a perfect picture to complement your poem.
Well done. Maybe you should write another.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and positive comments.
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed your rhymes in this limerick. The picture you supplied complemented the poem well. I can understand why the snow would be a problem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed your rhymes in this limerick. The picture you supplied complemented the poem well. I can understand why the snow would be a problem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much..Frankly I have never seen snow except in American movies. My cousins who live in USA used to tell us about how snow shovelling is hard work...
Comment from mermaids
Your poetic form and use of words captures our full range of emotions about snow. It is beautiful to watch the flakes come down but the piling up and shoveling are a chore. You have a strong steady beat in your words and this is a unique limerick.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Your poetic form and use of words captures our full range of emotions about snow. It is beautiful to watch the flakes come down but the piling up and shoveling are a chore. You have a strong steady beat in your words and this is a unique limerick.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much.
Comment from lyenochka
This was a good attempt as you kept the rhyme scheme. The meter is not quite right. Since you chose the amphibrachic form, you might need to change some of the working to keep the da DUM da da DUM da DUM meter and the last line should stay 8 syllables. Maybe:
Snow dancing's a magical sight
Its falling is such a delight
By piling up fast
I now am aghast
Delighting became a sad plight
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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This was a good attempt as you kept the rhyme scheme. The meter is not quite right. Since you chose the amphibrachic form, you might need to change some of the working to keep the da DUM da da DUM da DUM meter and the last line should stay 8 syllables. Maybe:
Snow dancing's a magical sight
Its falling is such a delight
By piling up fast
I now am aghast
Delighting became a sad plight
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Not being a native speaker IT is difficult for me to know stressed and unstressed syllables I didn't those any form .I just wrote keeping only syllable bounty and rhymes in mind one reader suggested that I needed an extra syllable in the last line .so I added a .Google search says Limerick can be 8 to 9 syllables I thought it should be eight I am changing the first two lines as per your suggestions.
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Yes, stress is so very hard from language to language. I had to learn English as age six so I think got the sense of stress easily at that age.
The two meter choices are:
Amphibrachic 88558
or Anapestic 99669
Some people say it can be this way or that way and are more loose but others are really strict about the meter. The best explanation I received was from Phyllis:
https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=962787
Comment from royowen
Although I live in a place that simply does not yield snow, and apart from a bief time as a child, I never learned to sculpture it. Although once in New York I did attempt, but not my gift. Beautifully written Santha, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Although I live in a place that simply does not yield snow, and apart from a bief time as a child, I never learned to sculpture it. Although once in New York I did attempt, but not my gift. Beautifully written Santha, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Frankly ,Roy I have never seen snow in all my 68 years. I have seen them in American movies. and my relatives who live in US used to curse snow .
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely down limerick about snowflakes. I would have made it about political snowflakes but that is just my warped sense of humor and deranged muse speaking
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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nicely down limerick about snowflakes. I would have made it about political snowflakes but that is just my warped sense of humor and deranged muse speaking
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Yeah i Dont think I have that kind of ability ,Thanks for stopping by.
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thanks as always
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Santha,
This is a well done limerick about the two ways of seeing snow. It can be fun with sledding and snowmen and maybe no school. But it also means shoveling and hard traveling.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Hi Santha,
This is a well done limerick about the two ways of seeing snow. It can be fun with sledding and snowmen and maybe no school. But it also means shoveling and hard traveling.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much ,Joan for stopping by.
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You are most kindly welcome, Santha.
Joan