They Live by Blood
Vampires can be charming and seductive.2 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
I think "she his for all time" doesn't have enough syllables. Also, you might want to consider changing the grammar on that line. "Now she is his for all time" or something like that would work. Still, those are only suggestions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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I think "she his for all time" doesn't have enough syllables. Also, you might want to consider changing the grammar on that line. "Now she is his for all time" or something like that would work. Still, those are only suggestions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the catch. Appreciate your feedback.
Comment from Kahlani
Your first line sucked me in-no pun intended! 'In shadows, they prowl' - I imagined a vampire on the hunt, shrouded in a black cape, lurking in the alleyway. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Your first line sucked me in-no pun intended! 'In shadows, they prowl' - I imagined a vampire on the hunt, shrouded in a black cape, lurking in the alleyway. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the read. Wonder what could be done to make this a five star review?