The Pier
A pier on the lake6 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done and captures the mood very well. I like the image of the pier at sunset. the word serene nicely captures the mood of the poem in 8 words how to do but you nailed it
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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nicely done and captures the mood very well. I like the image of the pier at sunset. the word serene nicely captures the mood of the poem in 8 words how to do but you nailed it
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a lovely poem! The idea of a "flame gilded pier" is perfect. I like how you also included "still night." Together that goes so well. I appreciate how you've captured such a wonderful moment with just a few words.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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What a lovely poem! The idea of a "flame gilded pier" is perfect. I like how you also included "still night." Together that goes so well. I appreciate how you've captured such a wonderful moment with just a few words.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Michael. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this piece., especially to review but there's a nice sense of feeling and warmth to this one.
Best of luck in the competition
GMG
These short pieces are notoriously tricky
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Hi there,
I liked this piece., especially to review but there's a nice sense of feeling and warmth to this one.
Best of luck in the competition
GMG
These short pieces are notoriously tricky
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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You are correct-they are tricky. Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
Still night -2
Flame gilded pier - 4
Serene-2
Correct form and count. I think you have a perfect theme for the contest. This is just the type of poetry the secret FanStory voters prefer. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Still night -2
Flame gilded pier - 4
Serene-2
Correct form and count. I think you have a perfect theme for the contest. This is just the type of poetry the secret FanStory voters prefer. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
Comment from Julie Helms
You did a great job within this incredibly small format to set a mood: still, serene. With the gilded pier the idea of a sunset being involved even came through, though not mentioned...very well done!
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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You did a great job within this incredibly small format to set a mood: still, serene. With the gilded pier the idea of a sunset being involved even came through, though not mentioned...very well done!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
Comment from zanya
Not a word wasted here in this short format of the 2/4/2 and the poem paints a quiet, colorful night scene 'gilded pier' all adding up to a distinct sense of serenity.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Not a word wasted here in this short format of the 2/4/2 and the poem paints a quiet, colorful night scene 'gilded pier' all adding up to a distinct sense of serenity.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your lovely comment.