As We Grow Older
a Cinquain5 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like dementia has taken hold in this post as our brain cells die and we revert back to being a helpless child. Old age can be a blessing and a curse, al poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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It sounds like dementia has taken hold in this post as our brain cells die and we revert back to being a helpless child. Old age can be a blessing and a curse, al poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Yes, this poem could be describing the first stage of dementia. Thank you so much for sharing, Dolly.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You wrote a good cinquain.
-Effective imagery describing childhood.
-I like the repetition with "beckons" and "back."
-I also like how you make this transition to
older age by using the "enchanting call of childhood."
-Very good concluding lines and a very good poem.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You wrote a good cinquain.
-Effective imagery describing childhood.
-I like the repetition with "beckons" and "back."
-I also like how you make this transition to
older age by using the "enchanting call of childhood."
-Very good concluding lines and a very good poem.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your incisive review and kind praise.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. I love how you show childhood beckoning with an "enchanting call". For me that captures how we often feel (and forget) as we grow older. The emotion of your poem shines through effortlessly. Keep sharing your wonderful work!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Nicely done. I love how you show childhood beckoning with an "enchanting call". For me that captures how we often feel (and forget) as we grow older. The emotion of your poem shines through effortlessly. Keep sharing your wonderful work!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much, Michael, for your wonderful praise. I am delighted you like my phrasing. Pssst! I just posted a nonet. Can you guess which one?
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
this is a very nice and accurate description of the facts about the inevitable progress of getting older. This is a very nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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this is a very nice and accurate description of the facts about the inevitable progress of getting older. This is a very nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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I can attest that growing old is no fun. Many thanks for your kind praise.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Yes, I've always thought it rather inviting that we so often lose our short-term memory but can vividly remember our childhood experiences. Your cinquain skilfully conveys this in such few words, complemented beautifully with your visual. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Yes, I've always thought it rather inviting that we so often lose our short-term memory but can vividly remember our childhood experiences. Your cinquain skilfully conveys this in such few words, complemented beautifully with your visual. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, for your kind praise.