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Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Handsomeness "inspiring poems for the souls and hearts
4 total reviews
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
Wow, this is a sculpted work of art! I love the descriptions, ranks of pearls, never heard that before! And incorporating a tounge-in-cheek finish, bravo!! Maddy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Wow, this is a sculpted work of art! I love the descriptions, ranks of pearls, never heard that before! And incorporating a tounge-in-cheek finish, bravo!! Maddy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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thanks Maddy, your review is very encouraging :) am glad you liked my poem, take care !
Sarah
Comment from jim vecchio
This is a great entry for the contest and an unusual choice for a cinquain. Your unique voice shows through each of your entries. Your well-chosen words call out your poetic genius.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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This is a great entry for the contest and an unusual choice for a cinquain. Your unique voice shows through each of your entries. Your well-chosen words call out your poetic genius.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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thanks a million Jim Vecchio, i cannot thank You enough for your encouraging words of support. God bless You. Sarah
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I may bed in a wheelchair now, but God has blessed me greatly.
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I thought I should explain. Three fingers of my left hand are a bit numb and sometimes cause typos. Please forgive. Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is unusual and post Sarah, and I enjoyed your well chosen words. Is (Your Smile) the title? You certainly brought this stone statue to life here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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This is unusual and post Sarah, and I enjoyed your well chosen words. Is (Your Smile) the title? You certainly brought this stone statue to life here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Many thanks Dolly, God bless You, and your family. Hugs
Sarah
Comment from phill doran
Hello Sarah,
Good work. A very amusing piece, indeed.
I think you meant to express the Cinquain 2-4-6-8-2, in which case lines 2 and 3 need to join as a single line. Maybe look at the presentation and close up the empty lines, or insert one between lines 1 and 2 for uniformity.
But of course I am really taken by your word choice - I assume the 'magnificent swelling' to be a mouth ulcer!
A good, fresh approach.
I iwsh you well with this piece.
cheers
phill
PS, I'd also punctuate this work differently. I'm no expert so take only what you want.
Your smile;
two ranks of pearls.
Your eyes, two ocean waves.
Of your magnificence swelling;
splendid!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Hello Sarah,
Good work. A very amusing piece, indeed.
I think you meant to express the Cinquain 2-4-6-8-2, in which case lines 2 and 3 need to join as a single line. Maybe look at the presentation and close up the empty lines, or insert one between lines 1 and 2 for uniformity.
But of course I am really taken by your word choice - I assume the 'magnificent swelling' to be a mouth ulcer!
A good, fresh approach.
I iwsh you well with this piece.
cheers
phill
PS, I'd also punctuate this work differently. I'm no expert so take only what you want.
Your smile;
two ranks of pearls.
Your eyes, two ocean waves.
Of your magnificence swelling;
splendid!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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hi Phill, I may consider, your suggestions,
Many thanks,
Sarah