Tea with the Red Lion
About the Ukraine an Russian War3 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I felt the strength to fight here as the neighbour invades and blood is shed, but resilience remains within as the red lion fights on, I adored the sentiment here and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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I felt the strength to fight here as the neighbour invades and blood is shed, but resilience remains within as the red lion fights on, I adored the sentiment here and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much , it's appreciated.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Congrats on your first post! I enjoyed it. I love your word choices. The line "as blood deepens the crimson on your coat and mane" really stood out! The way you share solitude is beautiful. And the reflection while waiting for your tea is perfect. Your poem has such emotion. Fantastic job!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Congrats on your first post! I enjoyed it. I love your word choices. The line "as blood deepens the crimson on your coat and mane" really stood out! The way you share solitude is beautiful. And the reflection while waiting for your tea is perfect. Your poem has such emotion. Fantastic job!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you I appreciate the review sharing my work is new.
Comment from Ang Tang
First of all, great concept. Very creative and a unique and interesting perspective. I do have some constructive criticism, though.
1. It's a little bit hard to read. Maybe use a bolder font or a less vibrant background next time
2. It lacks organization/ structure. It doesn't seem to be a well-planned out poem because there isn't consistent rhythm. Additionally, more cohesion throughout (where if you separated all the different sections, they'd all have enough things in common that the reader knows for sure it belongs in the poem.)
Thank you for letting me read your work
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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First of all, great concept. Very creative and a unique and interesting perspective. I do have some constructive criticism, though.
1. It's a little bit hard to read. Maybe use a bolder font or a less vibrant background next time
2. It lacks organization/ structure. It doesn't seem to be a well-planned out poem because there isn't consistent rhythm. Additionally, more cohesion throughout (where if you separated all the different sections, they'd all have enough things in common that the reader knows for sure it belongs in the poem.)
Thank you for letting me read your work
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you
