An Anguished Array of Acrostics
Viewing comments for Prologue "The Infection of Grief"Acrostics that spell out their own poem!
18 total reviews
Comment from Jacob1395
This is a really sad and emotional piece, for me, as I was reading, I thought of a married couple who's relationship had sadly broken down over time, and that they no longer feel the same way towards each other as they once did. A well written piece. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a really sad and emotional piece, for me, as I was reading, I thought of a married couple who's relationship had sadly broken down over time, and that they no longer feel the same way towards each other as they once did. A well written piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow, wow, wow!! Did you ever hit it out of the park with THIS one!! Usually, I don't "love" acrostics because words and phrases get contorted to "fit," but not under your talented pen, they don't!! This flowed like a luscious caramel sauce over premium ice cream (can you tell I'm writing this on an empty stomach...and a sweet tooth?)
This was absolute artistry, and I fully expect to see it in the Winner's Circle. FANTASTIC job!! xoxox
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Wow, wow, wow!! Did you ever hit it out of the park with THIS one!! Usually, I don't "love" acrostics because words and phrases get contorted to "fit," but not under your talented pen, they don't!! This flowed like a luscious caramel sauce over premium ice cream (can you tell I'm writing this on an empty stomach...and a sweet tooth?)
This was absolute artistry, and I fully expect to see it in the Winner's Circle. FANTASTIC job!! xoxox
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Videl
This poem tells well the grief of having to cut down a tree that has been part of your life for a long time. But will not bring any more new memories.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day
Joan
P S I have just published a book titled 'The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry. by Joan Pechter. It is available on Amazon.com.
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Hi Videl
This poem tells well the grief of having to cut down a tree that has been part of your life for a long time. But will not bring any more new memories.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day
Joan
P S I have just published a book titled 'The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry. by Joan Pechter. It is available on Amazon.com.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write here about grief and how it can grip us and rot our inner core just like this tree rotting inside. We feel broken inside and it takes a long time to see the positives once more, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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A poignant write here about grief and how it can grip us and rot our inner core just like this tree rotting inside. We feel broken inside and it takes a long time to see the positives once more, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from Neonewman
I enjoyed this well-crafted Acrostic you have entered for this particular writing prompt. I feel there may be an underlying meaning as I reached the end.
God bless,
Steve
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I enjoyed this well-crafted Acrostic you have entered for this particular writing prompt. I feel there may be an underlying meaning as I reached the end.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from HarryT
I like how the poem began but at times the meaning becomes jumbled. Examples: 1. Why is the ground unforgiving? Would it not be nourished by the tree? 2. Why would memories be erased? You don't need the tree to have memories of its existence. 3. How could one relive a life that never was? Actually, I had the feeling that the last stanza was more about a lover than the tree.
I believe this poem has potential, but it requires some reworking.
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I like how the poem began but at times the meaning becomes jumbled. Examples: 1. Why is the ground unforgiving? Would it not be nourished by the tree? 2. Why would memories be erased? You don't need the tree to have memories of its existence. 3. How could one relive a life that never was? Actually, I had the feeling that the last stanza was more about a lover than the tree.
I believe this poem has potential, but it requires some reworking.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from Kahlani
Poor tree! I thought it was clever how the narrative flows throughout the poem. Then, at the end, you bring it together by showing the connection between the tree and the writer. Well done.
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Poor tree! I thought it was clever how the narrative flows throughout the poem. Then, at the end, you bring it together by showing the connection between the tree and the writer. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from gansach
This is a beautiful entry for the Acrostic Poetry competition. Your presentation is wonderful, the artwork a perfect complement to your words. The bold first letters make it easy to read and see the acrostic. Grief is a profound emotion and affects each person individually. There is no end to it and we can let it consume us and color our lives sad and dark or invite it in and learn to live with it. Well done!
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This is a beautiful entry for the Acrostic Poetry competition. Your presentation is wonderful, the artwork a perfect complement to your words. The bold first letters make it easy to read and see the acrostic. Grief is a profound emotion and affects each person individually. There is no end to it and we can let it consume us and color our lives sad and dark or invite it in and learn to live with it. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from DonandVicki
I really enjoyed your well crafted acrostic. I got the strong feeling of loss of a loved one. As we all grow older, we get the feeling of reality that we all have to face one day. WE all need to come closer to God and receive his grace.
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I really enjoyed your well crafted acrostic. I got the strong feeling of loss of a loved one. As we all grow older, we get the feeling of reality that we all have to face one day. WE all need to come closer to God and receive his grace.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from jake cosmos aller
you did a great job with this. I love how you linked it to being old in the last stanza I liked this lines the best
Growing older myself, but you look the same when I sleep,
Reliving a life with you that never did come to pass.
Instead of living for you, I let this poisoned loss seep,
Everything in me yearns to just tear it out - alas -
For better or worse, it's burrowed far too deep.
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you did a great job with this. I love how you linked it to being old in the last stanza I liked this lines the best
Growing older myself, but you look the same when I sleep,
Reliving a life with you that never did come to pass.
Instead of living for you, I let this poisoned loss seep,
Everything in me yearns to just tear it out - alas -
For better or worse, it's burrowed far too deep.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024