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Comment from zanya
This Naani reflects upon the sentiments associated with a lonely heart and how it impacts us. However there is always the possibility of allowing ourselves to think about the possibility of reopening ourselves to 'Love before it's too late.'
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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This Naani reflects upon the sentiments associated with a lonely heart and how it impacts us. However there is always the possibility of allowing ourselves to think about the possibility of reopening ourselves to 'Love before it's too late.'
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A wonderful message for any day or any time... well-done, thoughtful naani for the contest! Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the competition! ;)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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A wonderful message for any day or any time... well-done, thoughtful naani for the contest! Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the competition! ;)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
A lonely heart closed tight
The weight will never feel light
Love before it's too late
Don't let time seal your fate
This is very good, and the theme is one many can relate to. I would rethink the title though. To improve your odds of winning. I have two suggestions.
1) In the font size. Makes it easier for older eyes to read.
2) Use a picture of a loving elderly couple, preferably a recent marriage picture
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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A lonely heart closed tight
The weight will never feel light
Love before it's too late
Don't let time seal your fate
This is very good, and the theme is one many can relate to. I would rethink the title though. To improve your odds of winning. I have two suggestions.
1) In the font size. Makes it easier for older eyes to read.
2) Use a picture of a loving elderly couple, preferably a recent marriage picture
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, I will work on it. Thank you for your suggestions.
Comment from jessizero
I loved the message behind this beautiful poem. I think it's something to which many of us can relate. I also like that you used rhyme, and you seem to have gotten the syllable count right. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I loved the message behind this beautiful poem. I think it's something to which many of us can relate. I also like that you used rhyme, and you seem to have gotten the syllable count right. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you for such a wonderful review.