Body of a Horse, Heart of a Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Flight From Danger"A modern twist on Greek Mythology.
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this chapter. It flowed well. I liked the true horsemanship going on as well, with the persistence of the filly, White Lightning, and the fact that Diantha releases the cinch.
Little fix:
In the depths of a wood older, it seemed, than time itself, she could forget about her horrid finace, Wilson,
I am sure you mean fiance.
Diantha bowed her head in exhaustion too, but didn't dare fall asleep.
I would put a comma after exhaustion as well, so:
Diantha bowed her head in exhaustion, too, but didn't dare fall asleep.
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I liked reading this chapter. It flowed well. I liked the true horsemanship going on as well, with the persistence of the filly, White Lightning, and the fact that Diantha releases the cinch.
Little fix:
In the depths of a wood older, it seemed, than time itself, she could forget about her horrid finace, Wilson,
I am sure you mean fiance.
Diantha bowed her head in exhaustion too, but didn't dare fall asleep.
I would put a comma after exhaustion as well, so:
Diantha bowed her head in exhaustion, too, but didn't dare fall asleep.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda------thank goodness for White Lighting is all I can say--well, that and where are they and who's Mr. Bullhorn? Be sure to tune in after a bit for the answers to these and other burning questions!
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda------thank goodness for White Lighting is all I can say--well, that and where are they and who's Mr. Bullhorn? Be sure to tune in after a bit for the answers to these and other burning questions!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024