2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from lyenochka
Alas, poor tomatoes. My big tomatoes are still green! Next time I'm only planting cherry tomatoes!
I liked your personification of September tripping and falling and your wordplay about "Fall".
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Alas, poor tomatoes. My big tomatoes are still green! Next time I'm only planting cherry tomatoes!
I liked your personification of September tripping and falling and your wordplay about "Fall".
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I remember trying to grow tomatoes in my living room lol I had a huge window with lots of sunlight. After a while, my whole house smelled like tomatoes, a bad idea.
Thank you, Big Sister. I hope you are having a great weekend .. fun and not too busy.
love,
MariVal
Comment from Neonewman
Falling face first into Autumn, brilliant play on words, Gypsy. This is why I enjoy reading your work. You made dead tomato vines seem violent.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Falling face first into Autumn, brilliant play on words, Gypsy. This is why I enjoy reading your work. You made dead tomato vines seem violent.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, Steve
Gypsy
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My pleasure.
Comment from Ulla
Yes it does doesn't it. What I mean that the end of September trips and falls over dead tomato vines. What a wonderful way to put it. Un abrazo y besitos, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Yes it does doesn't it. What I mean that the end of September trips and falls over dead tomato vines. What a wonderful way to put it. Un abrazo y besitos, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much.
Have a wonderful weekend ☺️
Gypsy ❤️
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It's cooler here in Texas but still basically in the throes of summer. Summer will probably last until the end of November or beginning of December. Once in a while, Mother Nature will surprise us. LOL Your poem and presentation are wonderful.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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It's cooler here in Texas but still basically in the throes of summer. Summer will probably last until the end of November or beginning of December. Once in a while, Mother Nature will surprise us. LOL Your poem and presentation are wonderful.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much.
Have a wonderful weekend ☺️
Gypsy ❤️
Comment from RJ Heritage
Beautiful poem, I especially like how you cleverly use the word Fall to convey a double meaning. Thank you for posting this creative Haiku poem. Hope you have a good evening. God blessings.
RJ
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Beautiful poem, I especially like how you cleverly use the word Fall to convey a double meaning. Thank you for posting this creative Haiku poem. Hope you have a good evening. God blessings.
RJ
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ
Gypsy 😊
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My pleasure
RJ
Comment from shelley kaye
those don't look like tomatoes...
and why is the woman holding a hula hoop naked? LOL
i like the september falls over the vines image - nice play for autumn!
a good haiku - thank you for sharing it!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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those don't look like tomatoes...
and why is the woman holding a hula hoop naked? LOL
i like the september falls over the vines image - nice play for autumn!
a good haiku - thank you for sharing it!
shelley :)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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The painting is called, end of summer, I guess I should have said so. LoL
Thank you very much, Shelley
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Wendy G
It's beautiful and original, very creatively written. Can you adjust it to seventeen syllables? Maybe "over dead tomato vines" for the third line? The imagery is vivid. I like the play on words for "fall".
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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It's beautiful and original, very creatively written. Can you adjust it to seventeen syllables? Maybe "over dead tomato vines" for the third line? The imagery is vivid. I like the play on words for "fall".
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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The 5-7-5 form is not mandatory with English language haiku, just 17 syllables or less. Over packing a haiku is not recommended, the rule of thumb is to be as succint as possible.
Thank you very much, Wendy 😊
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Love the imagery of the 2nd line especially with the play on Falls. And to include those dying tomato vines created still more enjoyable and colourful imagery. I think however you might have exceeded the syllable count by one? Thanks for sharing Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Love the imagery of the 2nd line especially with the play on Falls. And to include those dying tomato vines created still more enjoyable and colourful imagery. I think however you might have exceeded the syllable count by one? Thanks for sharing Debbie
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, Debbie,. I fixed the extra syllable, thank you.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! Love your employment of the haiku here, Gypsy -- that last line catches just as it should... Thanx for sharing, my lady, and have a great upcoming weekend! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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LOL! Love your employment of the haiku here, Gypsy -- that last line catches just as it should... Thanx for sharing, my lady, and have a great upcoming weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, Yvette. May you have a wonderful weekend as well.
Gypsy 😊