My Last Day on the Sea
A short story5 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I liked the way that in such a short piece you managed to convey the dramatic build-up of the storm, the eerie sensation that something was about to happen. And then the vivid image of the men falling into the jowls of the monster. Your flash then comes to a quiet, reflective conclusion, mourning the fact that nobody believed the story. Excellent! Well done and good luck! Debbie
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I liked the way that in such a short piece you managed to convey the dramatic build-up of the storm, the eerie sensation that something was about to happen. And then the vivid image of the men falling into the jowls of the monster. Your flash then comes to a quiet, reflective conclusion, mourning the fact that nobody believed the story. Excellent! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You are hands down the very best one. An entire story was related without the feeling of an ending being crammed on. There is no feeling of you watching your word count. And I loved the ironic twist. Well done. Karen
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You are hands down the very best one. An entire story was related without the feeling of an ending being crammed on. There is no feeling of you watching your word count. And I loved the ironic twist. Well done. Karen
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from zanya
yes interesting - we don't often read tales of the Loch Ness Monster, just rare and occasional sightings but here's a tale to set us thinking about this mysterious monster.
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yes interesting - we don't often read tales of the Loch Ness Monster, just rare and occasional sightings but here's a tale to set us thinking about this mysterious monster.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Amusing that a pirate called other pirates 'good men'. :) A fun offering for this limited contest. Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
home, we were --> home. We were
ship and that's --> ship, and that's
I called him the lochness monster but they just laugh --> I call him the Loch Ness monster but they just laugh OR I called him the Loch Ness monster but they just laughed.
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Amusing that a pirate called other pirates 'good men'. :) A fun offering for this limited contest. Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
home, we were --> home. We were
ship and that's --> ship, and that's
I called him the lochness monster but they just laugh --> I call him the Loch Ness monster but they just laugh OR I called him the Loch Ness monster but they just laughed.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
Comment from Lindsey Russell
I love this! It's an inventive take on a historical mystery. It is well executed and I love that I could almost feel myself out there on that stormy sea because of the descriptive words used. Good job! Happy writing!
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I love this! It's an inventive take on a historical mystery. It is well executed and I love that I could almost feel myself out there on that stormy sea because of the descriptive words used. Good job! Happy writing!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024