Lines of Communication
All relationships develop their own unique connections...8 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
Y. M. Roger,
Congrats on winning the 200 Word Flash Contest. This is a brilliantly written and compelling flash in keeping with your passion for writing fantasy/sci-fi. You skill and talent for storytelling is woven perfectly in each well composed line incorporating a seasoned writer's ability to capture his audience with first class crafted prose.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Y. M. Roger,
Congrats on winning the 200 Word Flash Contest. This is a brilliantly written and compelling flash in keeping with your passion for writing fantasy/sci-fi. You skill and talent for storytelling is woven perfectly in each well composed line incorporating a seasoned writer's ability to capture his audience with first class crafted prose.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Again, so good to see your smile in the listing, Eugene! I do so appreciate your reviews, but you have certainly made me blush with this one, sir... Thank you so much! ;) :) It really feels good to be writing again (albeit not as much as I would like!), and I look forward to getting back into the swing!! ;) Take care down there and have a wonderful weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Is it right to say that Tom had an epiphany moment as the storm drove him closer and closer to the tree and he realised that the interview was never meant to be? The tree was in fact communicating this to him. Your 200 word flash is well structured with excellent dialogue and a gradual plot development in which Tom ended up riding home again with a smile on his face. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Is it right to say that Tom had an epiphany moment as the storm drove him closer and closer to the tree and he realised that the interview was never meant to be? The tree was in fact communicating this to him. Your 200 word flash is well structured with excellent dialogue and a gradual plot development in which Tom ended up riding home again with a smile on his face. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Debbie - much appreciated!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your story is well written, with clear descriptions and realistic dialogue, but I must admit, I didn't fully understand it. Were the lines of communication between Tom and the oak tree of between Tom and Chris? Who was Chris? I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Your story is well written, with clear descriptions and realistic dialogue, but I must admit, I didn't fully understand it. Were the lines of communication between Tom and the oak tree of between Tom and Chris? Who was Chris? I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review, LJ [chris is short for christopher, the wizard -- have a good evening]
Comment from Begin Again
Nice one! Using the weather and the old tree to lead Tom to a decision...Very creative and interesting to read. I wish you well with the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Nice one! Using the weather and the old tree to lead Tom to a decision...Very creative and interesting to read. I wish you well with the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Glad you enjoyed... thank you for your time!!
Comment from lancellot
Well, I'm a bit confused. Who did he get an apology from? Why would he stop under a tree during a thunderstorm? And why when the rained stopped, did he ride his bike back home, and not to the interview he was going to?
If you can, I recommend making things clearer, or maybe it's just me.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Well, I'm a bit confused. Who did he get an apology from? Why would he stop under a tree during a thunderstorm? And why when the rained stopped, did he ride his bike back home, and not to the interview he was going to?
If you can, I recommend making things clearer, or maybe it's just me.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
So, this imaginary moan from an old oak tree made Tom go back home and give up his desire to be interviewed for a job he didn't want. It wasn't clear enough who encouraged him but he hollered out to Chris who he was an apprentice to and then everything turned out all right.
I suppose this is plausible but not realistic.
Jesse
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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So, this imaginary moan from an old oak tree made Tom go back home and give up his desire to be interviewed for a job he didn't want. It wasn't clear enough who encouraged him but he hollered out to Chris who he was an apprentice to and then everything turned out all right.
I suppose this is plausible but not realistic.
Jesse
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from royowen
I think all of would think in terms of inspired thought that the very things around us are moved by the hand of wisdom, if we could only submit to wisdom that none of really have, this is beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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I think all of would think in terms of inspired thought that the very things around us are moved by the hand of wisdom, if we could only submit to wisdom that none of really have, this is beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for your review!
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Well done, blessings Roy
Comment from Lindsey Russell
You pulled off a fantasy story in 200 words. That's quite an achievement! I love the ending too, we get to use our own imagination as to who Chris is/was and what happened to him. Good luck with the contest and happy writing!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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You pulled off a fantasy story in 200 words. That's quite an achievement! I love the ending too, we get to use our own imagination as to who Chris is/was and what happened to him. Good luck with the contest and happy writing!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review, Lindsey!
