My Venus de Milo
The Statue5 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I love the unusual topic.
The statue was found in Greece and just in time .. it was going to be demolished and mix with other construction materials.
You want to gift her limbs as you see her incomplete but I instead think not having limbs made her special and standout from the other female statues of that time.
This may be also because , we used to have a small replica in our front garden when I was a child.
I read your notes too . I think you will find the links I found a few years ago interesting.
They give us an idea of how she might have originally looked.
I tried to post the videos here but they block the SAVE button
I will send them using the PM option.
Enjoy!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Ciao !
I love the unusual topic.
The statue was found in Greece and just in time .. it was going to be demolished and mix with other construction materials.
You want to gift her limbs as you see her incomplete but I instead think not having limbs made her special and standout from the other female statues of that time.
This may be also because , we used to have a small replica in our front garden when I was a child.
I read your notes too . I think you will find the links I found a few years ago interesting.
They give us an idea of how she might have originally looked.
I tried to post the videos here but they block the SAVE button
I will send them using the PM option.
Enjoy!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the fantastic review and links, Tempeste. I really just came up with this because I wanted to create this crazy picture and ran with it from there. Lol.
Sorry about the late reply. I've been busy dealing with hurricane stuff here the last few days. Been pretty stressed and worked. Nowhere near as bad as a lot of people but enough, thas for sure.
Thank you again, T.
=]
Ron
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It was a great read !😐
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well done firstly for fitting your visual so perfectly to your original and delightfully humorous verse. This was fun to read, fulfils the prompt and is accompanied by some helpful, interesting notes. The full package as our statue now boasts! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Well done firstly for fitting your visual so perfectly to your original and delightfully humorous verse. This was fun to read, fulfils the prompt and is accompanied by some helpful, interesting notes. The full package as our statue now boasts! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the fantastic review and generous stars, Debbie. I really appreciate the good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Comment from SimianSavant
With her sexy new hands, maybe the The Venus of Milo can her her a p3nis of willow. This has got to be one of, if not the most, hilarious and ingenious pic ever posted on Fanstory. How it doesn't already have a six on it is a travesty. Let's get that fixed.
two small suggestions:
but my passport to Paris
has been rudely revoked. <= you have an extra syllable in your cadence. Replacing "has been" with "was" should fix this.
-particularly in a rolling triplet cadence which you and I are both fond of using, the reader sometimes doesn't know which beat the word of a line will start on. In some cases, this can be intuited. Example:
and cause subsequent damage
you did not foresee?
<= the reader might initially place the accent on CAUSE, when it should be on SUB. Then they realize right after that they fucked up, and they go back and read it again the right way. But what if instead of "and caused", you wrote "causing". Now there's only one possibility for interpreting where the accents go. So it saves the reader from second-guessing himself. Or maybe these days we have to say, their/themself.
Thanks for the laugh,
🦍
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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With her sexy new hands, maybe the The Venus of Milo can her her a p3nis of willow. This has got to be one of, if not the most, hilarious and ingenious pic ever posted on Fanstory. How it doesn't already have a six on it is a travesty. Let's get that fixed.
two small suggestions:
but my passport to Paris
has been rudely revoked. <= you have an extra syllable in your cadence. Replacing "has been" with "was" should fix this.
-particularly in a rolling triplet cadence which you and I are both fond of using, the reader sometimes doesn't know which beat the word of a line will start on. In some cases, this can be intuited. Example:
and cause subsequent damage
you did not foresee?
<= the reader might initially place the accent on CAUSE, when it should be on SUB. Then they realize right after that they fucked up, and they go back and read it again the right way. But what if instead of "and caused", you wrote "causing". Now there's only one possibility for interpreting where the accents go. So it saves the reader from second-guessing himself. Or maybe these days we have to say, their/themself.
Thanks for the laugh,
🦍
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the awesome review and fat sixer, SS. To be honest, you put more thought into this than I did. I was loaded after work and goofing around as usual. I knew the cadence was off here and there but just didn't care. When "I" read it aloud, it sounded awesome. Haha. If the masses read it differently...well, that's on them. I'm actually surprise all the words were even spelled correctly. I put whatever effort into this dumb write as I'm going to. I had way more fun creating this brilliant picture. Lol.
I appreciate the giant rating and suggestions, friend. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is such a clever poem! I love your humor. The playful tone shines through but I could also feel your appreciation for the art. Your creativity really stands out here! The rhymes make it an absolute joy to read.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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This is such a clever poem! I love your humor. The playful tone shines through but I could also feel your appreciation for the art. Your creativity really stands out here! The rhymes make it an absolute joy to read.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Michael. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Begin Again
The poem is a wonderful version of how history might have occurred and how it would or could be corrected. Amusing and entertaining. Your vision of Venus with arms is awesome.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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The poem is a wonderful version of how history might have occurred and how it would or could be corrected. Amusing and entertaining. Your vision of Venus with arms is awesome.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the great review, Carol. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.