Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Exploring more"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
3 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Another kick ass chapter, i'm telling you here on a roll! I can see how much work you put into it. And a lot of investigating to bring it together.I can appreciate what goes on behind the scenes! Another excellent chapter worthy of the six!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Another kick ass chapter, i'm telling you here on a roll! I can see how much work you put into it. And a lot of investigating to bring it together.I can appreciate what goes on behind the scenes! Another excellent chapter worthy of the six!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review! A great honor from another fantastic author!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Great job. I loved how you captured the tension between Mark and Aliss.
The basement discovery of the shoebox really added suspense. I could feel her mix of emotions as she got deeper into the mystery! The descriptions of her feelings were excellent. I can't wait to see where this goes next - great job!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Great job. I loved how you captured the tension between Mark and Aliss.
The basement discovery of the shoebox really added suspense. I could feel her mix of emotions as she got deeper into the mystery! The descriptions of her feelings were excellent. I can't wait to see where this goes next - great job!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your review!
Comment from Maria Millsaps
I found this writing to be compelling. Below are a few suggestions.
"I know it's a longer trip than normal, but if you stick to the schedule, everything should be just fine." Said Mark while he flipped through (the)is schedule(d) on his iPhone.
To this Mark let out a loud laugh and dropped his phone.
(Recommendation)
(Mark let out a loud laugh and dropped his phone.)
Soon enough (and) delete... Aliss was on the highway headed back home.
should read:
Soon enough Aliss was on the highway headed back home.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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I found this writing to be compelling. Below are a few suggestions.
"I know it's a longer trip than normal, but if you stick to the schedule, everything should be just fine." Said Mark while he flipped through (the)is schedule(d) on his iPhone.
To this Mark let out a loud laugh and dropped his phone.
(Recommendation)
(Mark let out a loud laugh and dropped his phone.)
Soon enough (and) delete... Aliss was on the highway headed back home.
should read:
Soon enough Aliss was on the highway headed back home.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the suggestions. I appreciate the feedback!
