An End to the Noise
Truly an end...9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty-word flash fiction story, An End to the Noise, has the required word count and finds this sad person taking the plunge after the disparaging words from others take the last measure of her hope.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This fifty-word flash fiction story, An End to the Noise, has the required word count and finds this sad person taking the plunge after the disparaging words from others take the last measure of her hope.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Greetings, Mr. Bill!! So good to hear from you and what a bright surprise!! Thanx so much for the stars, sir -- feels good to slowly get 'my pen' working again.... had to take a hiatus to find my anchor again, but I'm back: on my own with a great little house and this, my first year of retirement from teaching!! Working part time at a local department store just to keep me 'in with people' (scary in and of itself -- lol!) and enjoying so 'me' time! :) :) Again, thanx so much for the encouragement and shiny 'welcome back'! :) Yvette
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm glad to know you are feeling fine. This fifty word flash is beautifully written, but describes the sad thoughts and experience of a troubled protagonist. The chasm's call is greater than life. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I'm glad to know you are feeling fine. This fifty word flash is beautifully written, but describes the sad thoughts and experience of a troubled protagonist. The chasm's call is greater than life. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanx so much for your thoughtful review, LJ -- greatly appreciated! Have a wonderful week ahead! :) Yvette
Comment from Begin Again
Having lost two children, I can't tell you what chills and tears this story brought to me. The emotions of a child struggling with the bullying and life with Mom is felt. It happens more than any of us wish to admit.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Having lost two children, I can't tell you what chills and tears this story brought to me. The emotions of a child struggling with the bullying and life with Mom is felt. It happens more than any of us wish to admit.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Oh, I'm so sorry to hear your story, Carol, but your smile there in your pic reassures me that you still have their light shining inside of you! Thanx so much for your heartful review and may you have a wonderful week ahead! Yvette
Comment from tempeste
Ciao , you now have 7 votes!
Reading your story reminded me of a chat I had with my best friend a couple of years ago during the pandemic.
We decided to go out like Thelma and Louise when we got too old because having taken care of both our fathers we know there is nothing much after a certain age just illness, pain, loneliness.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Ciao , you now have 7 votes!
Reading your story reminded me of a chat I had with my best friend a couple of years ago during the pandemic.
We decided to go out like Thelma and Louise when we got too old because having taken care of both our fathers we know there is nothing much after a certain age just illness, pain, loneliness.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you so very much for your review, tempeste (love the kitty, by the way!)! Have a wonderful weekend!! :) Yvette
Comment from F. William Lester
A sad commentary of many lives. Good description and word choice for fifty words. I could feel despair and tension. Nicely done. I'm glad you're fine. Have a wonderful day and good luck in the contest. Be well.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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A sad commentary of many lives. Good description and word choice for fifty words. I could feel despair and tension. Nicely done. I'm glad you're fine. Have a wonderful day and good luck in the contest. Be well.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you so very much for your thoughtful review, William! Have a wonderful weekend!! :) Yvette
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You're welcome.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm glad you're fine because your 50 word flash had me a bit worried. You skilfully capture the escalating forces at play, the noise of the team contrasted with the silence and calm of the chasm below. It's a powerful read. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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I'm glad you're fine because your 50 word flash had me a bit worried. You skilfully capture the escalating forces at play, the noise of the team contrasted with the silence and calm of the chasm below. It's a powerful read. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you so very much for your thoughtful review, Debbie! Have a wonderful weekend!! :) Yvette
Comment from royowen
Yes, there is something compulsive about great heights or the dark depths of the chasm, ravine, or underground cave, there are a lot of divers who like to dive in bottomless flooded underground caves, some pay the price, well done good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Yes, there is something compulsive about great heights or the dark depths of the chasm, ravine, or underground cave, there are a lot of divers who like to dive in bottomless flooded underground caves, some pay the price, well done good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review!
Comment from phoegon
This is a strong and visceral word choice for the piece. It definitely helps us get inside the head of a nameless character and feel their inner turmoil. Great work!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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This is a strong and visceral word choice for the piece. It definitely helps us get inside the head of a nameless character and feel their inner turmoil. Great work!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review!
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This is such a sad story. So many people have faced the choice described in this piece. That being said, it is well written and concise, and not every story is a happy one. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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This is such a sad story. So many people have faced the choice described in this piece. That being said, it is well written and concise, and not every story is a happy one. Best wishes!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review!