The Watermelon Days
Free verse16 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Very descriptive, creating great imagery. Your use of alliteration adds to the flow of this free verse. Best of all is your wording summer as "watermelon days."
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Very descriptive, creating great imagery. Your use of alliteration adds to the flow of this free verse. Best of all is your wording summer as "watermelon days."
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Ginda.
Luv&stuff Katiemae1977
Comment from dragonpoet
HI Katie,
I like how each stanza tells of one thing that makes summer fun for kids.
I like the image of dancing on hot sand. I assume you call Summer watermelon days because that is the most eaten fruit in the season.
I beg to differ on cotton candy. I never liked it though I do have a sweet tooth. I much prefer caramel apples.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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HI Katie,
I like how each stanza tells of one thing that makes summer fun for kids.
I like the image of dancing on hot sand. I assume you call Summer watermelon days because that is the most eaten fruit in the season.
I beg to differ on cotton candy. I never liked it though I do have a sweet tooth. I much prefer caramel apples.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Joan!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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You're most welcome, Katie.
Joan
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your lovely free-verse. Lots of great imagery to remind the reader of the joys of summer. "Watermelon Days " is a great title too!
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed reading your lovely free-verse. Lots of great imagery to remind the reader of the joys of summer. "Watermelon Days " is a great title too!
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Nancy!
Comment from Nicki.B
This is a wonderful poem about summer. Each stanza taking us to a different delightful image brings back lovely memoriesfore. It was really enjoyable from start to finish.
Well done and best of luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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This is a wonderful poem about summer. Each stanza taking us to a different delightful image brings back lovely memoriesfore. It was really enjoyable from start to finish.
Well done and best of luck with the contest!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Nicki!
Comment from mermaids
Love the images created in your words. I especially like "children let minnows swim between their toes." It captures the essence of nature in summer. Your free verse form paints a picture of all the fun in the summer months.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Love the images created in your words. I especially like "children let minnows swim between their toes." It captures the essence of nature in summer. Your free verse form paints a picture of all the fun in the summer months.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much mermaids!
Comment from Cedar
Hello Katiemae,
It's good to meet you and welcome to Fanstory. I am so sorry to hear about all your health issues. I too have many health problems myself, I've been fighting MS for 33 years and many of the side effects that come with this awful disease.
Evidently, your health issues has not stopped you from becoming a very good writer. I enjoyed reading your free verse very much. I've lived on a farm all my life and have grown many. many watermelons and I was lucky enough to experience all the fun things that you mention before MS came calling.
I love your name, Katiemae, my Mother's name was Katie Pearl. I hope and pray the very best for you and may God bless and watch over you.
Keep writing, I've been writing since I was a young man and I find it's a great relaxer during stressful times...Welcome again, Katiemae. My name is Bill and my pen/name is Cedar.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Hello Katiemae,
It's good to meet you and welcome to Fanstory. I am so sorry to hear about all your health issues. I too have many health problems myself, I've been fighting MS for 33 years and many of the side effects that come with this awful disease.
Evidently, your health issues has not stopped you from becoming a very good writer. I enjoyed reading your free verse very much. I've lived on a farm all my life and have grown many. many watermelons and I was lucky enough to experience all the fun things that you mention before MS came calling.
I love your name, Katiemae, my Mother's name was Katie Pearl. I hope and pray the very best for you and may God bless and watch over you.
Keep writing, I've been writing since I was a young man and I find it's a great relaxer during stressful times...Welcome again, Katiemae. My name is Bill and my pen/name is Cedar.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Cedar for your lovely comments and super review. Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Your descriptions included in the verses of sights, sounds, tastes, and feelings of summer are very well expressed in the work. You draw graphic images in each readers' mind's eye. You used the style quite nicely and there is a delicate touch having your last line be the title of the poem. Well done.
Z
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Your descriptions included in the verses of sights, sounds, tastes, and feelings of summer are very well expressed in the work. You draw graphic images in each readers' mind's eye. You used the style quite nicely and there is a delicate touch having your last line be the title of the poem. Well done.
Z
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Robert! Glad you liked it.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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You're welcome!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed this poem. The poem described all the fun things in summer. Very descriptive and well written poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed this poem. The poem described all the fun things in summer. Very descriptive and well written poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Brenda!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well done, and I must congratulate you on using the effort to separate your various thoughts so that when it is read aloud, it moves along smoothly when we do not use punctuation we have to do the separation and I appreciate that very much because I am a person who has very limited vision, and I have to listen to the words that are being spoken. Thank you for such a nice poem. Patricia.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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This is very well done, and I must congratulate you on using the effort to separate your various thoughts so that when it is read aloud, it moves along smoothly when we do not use punctuation we have to do the separation and I appreciate that very much because I am a person who has very limited vision, and I have to listen to the words that are being spoken. Thank you for such a nice poem. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Patricia for your lovely comments and review.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Ulla
This is a light-hearted free verse poem about the summer. I time I dearly love. The imagery in your poem is marvellous, expressing everything summery. All best, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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This is a light-hearted free verse poem about the summer. I time I dearly love. The imagery in your poem is marvellous, expressing everything summery. All best, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Ulla.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977