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haiku (black and brown rumple)

a haiku

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Comment from Sue Smith
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Haha. I really love the turn in the last line. It took me completely by surprise. And Caterpillaring is a great word. It instantly brought up an image of the way caterpillars move

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024

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    Thank you, Sue
Comment from papa55mike
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Yes, we call them wooly boogers in the South, and they say if their fur is thick, it will be a hard winter. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024

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    Thank you, Mike
Comment from royowen
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It certainly seems like it, I like the wording of this haiku entry, the fist two lines seem to to be setting the scene for the caterpillar to turn into a pretty butterfly, well done, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024

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    Thank you, Roy
Comment from jessizero
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You did a great job with this pictureless haiku. You got the syllable count right, and I was impressed that you used a five-syllable word for your last line. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024

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    Thank you, Jessizero
Comment from RodG
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You make it fun to visualize this scene of caterpillar "rumpling" across an oak leaf. Clever new verbal you created--caterpillaring. Young readers will appreciate this haiku. Rod

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024

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    Thank you, Rod
Comment from kahpot
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Very well done, your words give the image of the caterpillar as it slides its way along the tree, your choice of font and background colors are excellent, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2024

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
    Thank you, kahpot