Nature at rest
The season when nature lies fallow and waits.12 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, winter is a very similar time in nature to refreshing sleep for the tired and exhausted human being, a form of restoration for the vegetation and restoration for the ground, it is actually a commandment in the bible, to let the ground be fallow, every seventh year, beautifully written Nancy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Oh yes, winter is a very similar time in nature to refreshing sleep for the tired and exhausted human being, a form of restoration for the vegetation and restoration for the ground, it is actually a commandment in the bible, to let the ground be fallow, every seventh year, beautifully written Nancy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you. It is one of my favorite nature scenes--hushed and serene.
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Well done,
Comment from estory
I thought you had perfect balance, a great nature image, and the first line especially just jumped off the page for me. The second line was pretty strong too, and you had built up a great sense of time and emotion standing still. The third line just didn't quite reach into that realm of epiphany to make a truly outstanding haiku. You need to connect the image of stillness and purity to some human experience like love or death, hope or transformation. It is kind of a mysterious line that speaks of patience maybe, but it just didn't jump for me. estory
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I thought you had perfect balance, a great nature image, and the first line especially just jumped off the page for me. The second line was pretty strong too, and you had built up a great sense of time and emotion standing still. The third line just didn't quite reach into that realm of epiphany to make a truly outstanding haiku. You need to connect the image of stillness and purity to some human experience like love or death, hope or transformation. It is kind of a mysterious line that speaks of patience maybe, but it just didn't jump for me. estory
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your comments. I think I was looking at the prompt as being the "feeling " of the season rather than specific human emotion--but I see your point. Thank you.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
There was no picture needed for THIS exceptional haiku! You set the vibe of peaceful dormancy well with each well-chosen syllable. The picture you brought to my mind was vivid and very strong. Really well done. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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There was no picture needed for THIS exceptional haiku! You set the vibe of peaceful dormancy well with each well-chosen syllable. The picture you brought to my mind was vivid and very strong. Really well done. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you. I love the scene described as I watch out the window at the complete stillness of an unbroken snow.
Comment from June Sargent
Soon our gardens will be enshrouded in white as the earth rests for a few months. It's a part of nature's cycle and helps us appreciate the next chapter when spring returns. Nice entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Soon our gardens will be enshrouded in white as the earth rests for a few months. It's a part of nature's cycle and helps us appreciate the next chapter when spring returns. Nice entry for the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your response--and the stars. I have always loved a snowbound, quiet day when all the work seems to pause and nap
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This is good for the prompt. The words create an image of an area of pristine white snow before and marks are made in it. It also tells us what Winter is. A season of waiting.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful rest of your week.
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Hi
This is good for the prompt. The words create an image of an area of pristine white snow before and marks are made in it. It also tells us what Winter is. A season of waiting.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful rest of your week.
Joan
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I am glad you liked the poem. I am always charmed by the snow and its seeming ability to pause the world,
Thanks and be well.
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I did like it.
No problem, Nancy.
I'll try my best to stay well.
Joan
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:-)
Comment from Begin Again
Your description is perfect! When winter decides to visit, it brings a blanket of snow and silence -- covering us with peace and blessings. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Your description is perfect! When winter decides to visit, it brings a blanket of snow and silence -- covering us with peace and blessings. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Exactly what I hoped to convey. Thank you for reading--and the stars/
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this snow-shrouded haiku. I kind of think you could tighten it by taking out the word 'and' in the first and second lines. Maybe say: Asleep, still, all white.
and instead of 'drear and' just say 'dreary' there.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I liked reading this snow-shrouded haiku. I kind of think you could tighten it by taking out the word 'and' in the first and second lines. Maybe say: Asleep, still, all white.
and instead of 'drear and' just say 'dreary' there.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your thoughts. I will think on those changes--especially the first line. Again, thanks.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You've created a good, snow filled picture of a dreary winter's night in your haiku, and the reader certainly needs no picture to visualise it. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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You've created a good, snow filled picture of a dreary winter's night in your haiku, and the reader certainly needs no picture to visualise it. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Tyyyyyyy
I love looking out the window at the snow that even the birds have not yet marked. The utter quiet. I just write what I see. Thanks for your thoughts
Comment from Maria Millsaps
The promises of winter. Your poem has a calming effect on the reader. It paints a picture of winter's plentitudes--a reminder to be thankful for the beauty winter brings. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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The promises of winter. Your poem has a calming effect on the reader. It paints a picture of winter's plentitudes--a reminder to be thankful for the beauty winter brings. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for reading. I was hoping the peace would show through the words.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This poem makes me think of one word: stillness. It is also calming to read this poem. It describes a winter night very well. Good job with it. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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This poem makes me think of one word: stillness. It is also calming to read this poem. It describes a winter night very well. Good job with it. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Yes, stillness. Exactly. That is what I love about snow--the hush. Thank you for reading and understanding.
