Anatomy of a Marriage
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Anatomy of a Marriage Ch.3"A story of a couple whose marriage is in trouble.
20 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That doesn't sound good! I was so cross that Marsha's son Joey had witnessed that, if you're going to play away from home, at least make sure it's miles away. I wonder what his boss wants to see Marsha about. I'm off to find out. :)) This is goooood! :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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That doesn't sound good! I was so cross that Marsha's son Joey had witnessed that, if you're going to play away from home, at least make sure it's miles away. I wonder what his boss wants to see Marsha about. I'm off to find out. :)) This is goooood! :)) Sandra
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you for another great review. I hope you find it worth you time to read my story. I certainly appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from royowen
It would be rather devastating to find out after all these years, of suspecting one's partner is having an affair with someone that he is buying expensive jewellery for, but you are most imaginative Beth, perhaps it is a surprise, but the elder some, presumably with a steady head, has also spotted his father too. Beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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It would be rather devastating to find out after all these years, of suspecting one's partner is having an affair with someone that he is buying expensive jewellery for, but you are most imaginative Beth, perhaps it is a surprise, but the elder some, presumably with a steady head, has also spotted his father too. Beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Roy, This is actually something that really happened, so I'm not using much imagination. Don't expect me to turn it into some happy ending. It didn't happen me. I was just privy to knowing what was going on.
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Thank you, Roy, This is actually something that really happened, so I'm not using much imagination. Don't expect me to turn it into some happy ending. It didn't happen me. I was just privy to knowing what was going on.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a sad and too common story. You do a good job of keeping up the suspense for what will happen next and how she will handle the terrible place she's in.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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This is a sad and too common story. You do a good job of keeping up the suspense for what will happen next and how she will handle the terrible place she's in.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thanik you Verna. It is a common story that I'm very thankful isn't my story. It takes two committed people to have a happy marriage and when one isn't committed it sometimes is something that can be fixed.
Comment from Ric Myworld
You're doing a great job of keep us readers guessing. I can't tell if maybe she is jumping to conclusions, or if there really might be something going on. But it sure is fun to read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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You're doing a great job of keep us readers guessing. I can't tell if maybe she is jumping to conclusions, or if there really might be something going on. But it sure is fun to read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you, RIc, I glad you still reading my posts. This one is harder to write because it didn't happen to me. I'm glad it didn't.
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Thank you, RIc, I glad you still reading my posts. This one is harder to write because it didn't happen to me. I'm glad it didn't.
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Thank you, RIc, I glad you still reading my posts. This one is harder to write because it didn't happen to me. I'm glad it didn't.
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Thank you, RIc, I glad you still reading my posts. This one is harder to write because it didn't happen to me. I'm glad it didn't.
Comment from forestport12
Well now, that was a sharp hook to end it with, making me wonder what the person on the phone has to say. I can imagine the conflicted feelings she's going through. Believable. Intriguing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Well now, that was a sharp hook to end it with, making me wonder what the person on the phone has to say. I can imagine the conflicted feelings she's going through. Believable. Intriguing.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thank you for a nice review. I'm hope you'll check to see what happens.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
It's so sad that their son found out about the affair first. I hope Marsha will find a wise way to stop Trenton and get him to confess. On the other hand, I don't know if he can change his ways enough to make it worth her avoiding the divorce like she would prefer.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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It's so sad that their son found out about the affair first. I hope Marsha will find a wise way to stop Trenton and get him to confess. On the other hand, I don't know if he can change his ways enough to make it worth her avoiding the divorce like she would prefer.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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This isn't total fiction. It based on my friend's true story, so far, I haven't changed what really happened. Thanks for the review.
Beth
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an intriguing chapter. "Seek and ye shall find." Marsha searched her husbands shirts and jackets and found what she was looking for...whether she wanted it or not. A good liar could find legitimate reasons for the receipts Marsha found. Your last paragraph leaves us hanging. good job.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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This is an intriguing chapter. "Seek and ye shall find." Marsha searched her husbands shirts and jackets and found what she was looking for...whether she wanted it or not. A good liar could find legitimate reasons for the receipts Marsha found. Your last paragraph leaves us hanging. good job.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the review. This is late but I do appreciate the comments.
Beth
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Thank you for the review. This is late but I do appreciate the comments.
Beth
Comment from joann r romei
Very good, and you left us hanging and wanting more of the story, I wished she hadn't asked her son, but he knew already. Can't wait to hear the next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
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Very good, and you left us hanging and wanting more of the story, I wished she hadn't asked her son, but he knew already. Can't wait to hear the next chapter.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Joann.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am wondering what Bill wants to talk with Marsha about. I'm pretty sure it will be informative. You're doing a good job with this story.
e shifted his feet and cleared his throat before he spoke. "I didn't want to say anything, (spoke,)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I am wondering what Bill wants to talk with Marsha about. I'm pretty sure it will be informative. You're doing a good job with this story.
e shifted his feet and cleared his throat before he spoke. "I didn't want to say anything, (spoke,)
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Barbara, I appreciate the nice comments.
Beth
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Thank you, Barbara, I appreciate the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
She talked to her son about his father having an affair! I can't imagine ever bringing my kids into a situation like that.
Something that stood out to me was the number of times you use the word "she" - this usually signals more telling than showing. You might want to be aware of that going forward.
Why would he jump to the conclusion that she is asking about who is going because she is jealous? I guess a guilty conscience could be the cause for that.
I imagine the call from the partner is about Trenton's drinking problem. That's the hook for the next chapter - what's that conversation going to be like.
I'm glad to see you writing some fiction, Beth. Looking forward to hearing the conversation they have.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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She talked to her son about his father having an affair! I can't imagine ever bringing my kids into a situation like that.
Something that stood out to me was the number of times you use the word "she" - this usually signals more telling than showing. You might want to be aware of that going forward.
Why would he jump to the conclusion that she is asking about who is going because she is jealous? I guess a guilty conscience could be the cause for that.
I imagine the call from the partner is about Trenton's drinking problem. That's the hook for the next chapter - what's that conversation going to be like.
I'm glad to see you writing some fiction, Beth. Looking forward to hearing the conversation they have.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Pam, it is more like fictionalized truth than pure fiction since it is based on the story of my friend's marriage. She told me I should write about it.
Beth
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Thank you, Pam, it is more like fictionalized truth than pure fiction since it is based on the story of my friend's marriage. She told me I should write about it.
Beth