The Internet Mouse
Sometimes it's better not to be noticed.7 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
It has an interesting premise. But I think three things hold it back. I, we don't really learn why the world was fascinated with the mouse. The app would translate any animals thought, and therefore would be worldwide and common. Also, the moral. We never see what the benefits of the mouse's quiet life were, nor do we see the drawback of his public life. We are simply "told"
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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It has an interesting premise. But I think three things hold it back. I, we don't really learn why the world was fascinated with the mouse. The app would translate any animals thought, and therefore would be worldwide and common. Also, the moral. We never see what the benefits of the mouse's quiet life were, nor do we see the drawback of his public life. We are simply "told"
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review and constructive suggestions.
Comment from royowen
I must agree with Byte basically, I don't think I would like being public like that, it would be most threatening, who knows who we invite into our lives, this is beautifully written my friend, quite imaginative, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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I must agree with Byte basically, I don't think I would like being public like that, it would be most threatening, who knows who we invite into our lives, this is beautifully written my friend, quite imaginative, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review.
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Comment from cupa tea
This is a cute little story and I like the lesson learned at the end. I didn't see anything that needed correcting in general. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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This is a cute little story and I like the lesson learned at the end. I didn't see anything that needed correcting in general. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from Teri7
I love this modern fable you have penned for the contest. That was a very cute and adorable pic you chose for the imagery along with your words. Looks like a winner to me! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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I love this modern fable you have penned for the contest. That was a very cute and adorable pic you chose for the imagery along with your words. Looks like a winner to me! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review and six star rating.
Comment from Aiona
What an interesting little fable. I would think some people would be afraid of a mouse talking. Or that there would be an outrage about mice being used as laboratory testing specimens. And maybe mouse would feel weary of being the spokesperson for so many causes in a more complicated public life. But it is a cute story!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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What an interesting little fable. I would think some people would be afraid of a mouse talking. Or that there would be an outrage about mice being used as laboratory testing specimens. And maybe mouse would feel weary of being the spokesperson for so many causes in a more complicated public life. But it is a cute story!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from Begin Again
Lessons learned...One must think twice before wanting more and not realizing how things would change. Like the saying "the grass isn't always greener on the other side." Well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Lessons learned...One must think twice before wanting more and not realizing how things would change. Like the saying "the grass isn't always greener on the other side." Well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a heartwarming story! I loved how Byte's curiosity led him on a remarkable adventure. The contrast between his initial excitement and eventual longing for his quiet corner was wonderful. I love everything about this but mainly the moral which you show so well. Wonderful job!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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This is a heartwarming story! I loved how Byte's curiosity led him on a remarkable adventure. The contrast between his initial excitement and eventual longing for his quiet corner was wonderful. I love everything about this but mainly the moral which you show so well. Wonderful job!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thanks for the review.