Truckin
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Truckin'"The left lane is for passing only
5 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow, your writing has so much energy. I love how you share Clyde's deep affection with Jane Ann. The way you capture their love and zest for life, makes the story so heartfelt. The tragic turn is handled with such rawness. Your storytelling drew me in and makes me feel every twist and turn. Brilliantly done!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Wow, your writing has so much energy. I love how you share Clyde's deep affection with Jane Ann. The way you capture their love and zest for life, makes the story so heartfelt. The tragic turn is handled with such rawness. Your storytelling drew me in and makes me feel every twist and turn. Brilliantly done!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Wow! What a fantastic review. For that I am invigorated. My wife has a bunch of kisses coming!
Comment from Wendy G
What a sad ending! And now I understand the introduction. Full circle story. I got the general idea at the end but had to keep reversing everything in my mind as we drive on the left. A fine story.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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What a sad ending! And now I understand the introduction. Full circle story. I got the general idea at the end but had to keep reversing everything in my mind as we drive on the left. A fine story.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you. The rest of the story is not a Ben Persons, or even Ohmie story, but hopefully people can connect at least a bit.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I know the upside down world of promotions. I have not read your other strories this is the first one. I loved it. That clyde lost his dearly beloved is the pits but, the story is first rate.
Karen
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I know the upside down world of promotions. I have not read your other strories this is the first one. I loved it. That clyde lost his dearly beloved is the pits but, the story is first rate.
Karen
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate your review.
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ooh it was chapter one. I will continue to read.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This sounds a little biographical, Wayne:-) Didn't you tell me once that you met your wife at a camp ground or trailer park?
I like how you began this story with a rant about trucks and killing them softly with some yet-to-be-engineered piece of technology; then you slid into the reason you wanted to do this through your story of romance and adventure.
Well, that was not the ending I expected at all! You might want to end it as you began . . . looking for a ray gun for trucks.
Sorry about your troubles posting - it's positively maddening sometimes.
Happy trails to you:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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This sounds a little biographical, Wayne:-) Didn't you tell me once that you met your wife at a camp ground or trailer park?
I like how you began this story with a rant about trucks and killing them softly with some yet-to-be-engineered piece of technology; then you slid into the reason you wanted to do this through your story of romance and adventure.
Well, that was not the ending I expected at all! You might want to end it as you began . . . looking for a ray gun for trucks.
Sorry about your troubles posting - it's positively maddening sometimes.
Happy trails to you:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Thank you.
Your ray gun idea is great for this post. I could just leave it out of the completed piece since readers would be going into the next part right away.
Comment from BethShelby
This was fun to read except for the loss of Jane Ann. I've not taken any road trips lately but having truckers doing all their driving in the passing lane would be enough to make one crazy.
For some reason this one came through twice.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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This was fun to read except for the loss of Jane Ann. I've not taken any road trips lately but having truckers doing all their driving in the passing lane would be enough to make one crazy.
For some reason this one came through twice.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I'm having a fit of a time with the FanStory program. Tom is trying to help. Sorry for the confusion.
