Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I like everything about this: the image, the choice of font and the way the words are presently tightly between the image at the top and the line at the bottom ...

That "thud" is like a ticking clock - it announces Fall, which leads to winter, which leads to spring ...

Well thought out and written. Good luck in the Haiku contest.

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Thanks for reading and a superb review zanya

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

This certainly gets the imagery going, as the apple's fall upon the leaves giving us that sound of seasons change, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Thanks for a great review zanya

Comment from Nicki.B

Excellent

This is a wonderful haiku om the journey of an apple leaving its place of growth to find itself ripe and ready to be lavished by a lucky recipient!
Isn't that it's destiny...
Captured beautifully, well done!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Great review zanya

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

your poem is just in time for the season...
apple pies...and apple cobbler...so many things
that can be made from this little red ball of tasty
treats...

I love your poem...and the picture speaks for itself...
so very nicely written...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya

reply by l.raven on 17-Sep-2024

your so very welcome...love xxoo

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This is lovely. In only a few words you have painted a terrific picture in the minds eye of the reader. Fall is such a beautiful season, but it does mark the end of the year. ...at least to me. Best of luck in the contest. :)

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Thanks for reading and a great review zanya

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Yes, I think there are so many indications of time's advancement to remind one of age speeding past, but greying hair or chests becoming stomachs, but the seasonal ripening apples are another falling to earth, beautifully wrtten, good luck blessings Roy
Suggestion : the falling apple,

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Superb review zanya

reply by royowen on 17-Sep-2024

Well done

Comment from Sue Smith

Excellent

This is a great haiku. Reference to the season, a strong image with even a sensory detail in the 'thud', and a linked observation adding a different perspective. Well done.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Great review zanya

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

I love apple picking time of year and your haiku highlights it beautifully. The sound of apples falling onto leaves creates an amazing image. Great entry for the contest

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Thanks for a great review zanya

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This was a great haiku for the contest. You got the syllable count right (for the popular format), and I liked your mental image. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Great review zanya

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the Haiku Poem writing prompt contest. Beautiful presentation. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good luck.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024

Thanks for reading and reviewing & Novali quote! Zanya