Damaged Ballerina
Dancing/dragging my way through life post-breakup3 total reviews
Comment from wilkswrites
The poem is awesome, well written (except that the handwriting causes the reader to have to reread and there is an "s" missing from the word "always" once in a while. You do a great job of expressing your frustration. Again, I feel your pain;i really do. BUT--Seriously, Keely -- ya gotta let go! There's a saying, "Never let a man tell you more than once that you're not the one for him."
If you are still going through this, know that having him nearby as a "friend" won't help you heal at all. Your wounds will continue to fester with puss and become infected (feel free to use that in your next poem).
My granddaughter has been involved with a young man who wrote her a letter a year or so ago expressing that he just wanted to be friends. Somehow, she convinced him to change his mind. After much sexual intercourse, spending the night over, purchasing huge presents for his birthday, receiving insignificant presents from him on her birthday, treating him out for her birthday her love for him convinced her to co-sign for a car just for him. A week later, he quit his job. Then he was spotted out with another woman. Once caught he said to her, "you're just upset that I am finally happy with someone else. I hated being with you. If you keep coming around asking questions, I'm gonna get my dad's gun and blow you away."
Can you imagine her devastation? It breaks my heart that she is still begging him to be with her.
I share this with you for a reason. Please try to not waste any more time on this one. Move on. It helped me to focus on something else. I started a business and began working on a business plan after my last breakup. Very quickly, the hurt started to subside, and the thoughts of him began to fade. So much so, that when I received a call from him one day, I didn't recognize his voice.
No one person should ever have permission to live inside of your head rent free. He ain't doing NOTHING to be there. Let dude go!
Gonna read the other one now. Hope I didn't come on too strongly.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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The poem is awesome, well written (except that the handwriting causes the reader to have to reread and there is an "s" missing from the word "always" once in a while. You do a great job of expressing your frustration. Again, I feel your pain;i really do. BUT--Seriously, Keely -- ya gotta let go! There's a saying, "Never let a man tell you more than once that you're not the one for him."
If you are still going through this, know that having him nearby as a "friend" won't help you heal at all. Your wounds will continue to fester with puss and become infected (feel free to use that in your next poem).
My granddaughter has been involved with a young man who wrote her a letter a year or so ago expressing that he just wanted to be friends. Somehow, she convinced him to change his mind. After much sexual intercourse, spending the night over, purchasing huge presents for his birthday, receiving insignificant presents from him on her birthday, treating him out for her birthday her love for him convinced her to co-sign for a car just for him. A week later, he quit his job. Then he was spotted out with another woman. Once caught he said to her, "you're just upset that I am finally happy with someone else. I hated being with you. If you keep coming around asking questions, I'm gonna get my dad's gun and blow you away."
Can you imagine her devastation? It breaks my heart that she is still begging him to be with her.
I share this with you for a reason. Please try to not waste any more time on this one. Move on. It helped me to focus on something else. I started a business and began working on a business plan after my last breakup. Very quickly, the hurt started to subside, and the thoughts of him began to fade. So much so, that when I received a call from him one day, I didn't recognize his voice.
No one person should ever have permission to live inside of your head rent free. He ain't doing NOTHING to be there. Let dude go!
Gonna read the other one now. Hope I didn't come on too strongly.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Hi,
Your poor granddaughter! That sounds absolutely devastating and awful. Some men have insane audacity. I hope she's doing better now.
I'm actually planning on returning to an old writing project to distract myself. I was in the works of planning out my 1st book some years ago, but put it to the side. I think I will return to it, so I can put more energy into positives. I'm more than ready to let him go, but my mind can't stop bludgeoning me with memories and what ifs. We broke up on positive terms- he just told me he didn't feel the same anymore and didn't want to lead me on. Honestly, this is nothing compared to some of the heartache I've experienced. I'm afraid I was a little dramatic in this poem 😅. But I recognize I need to move on pronto and stop letting him get to me.
Don't worry about not coming on too strongly. I'd much rather you speak your mind and not sugar coat. And it also takes A LOT to get rid of me haha
Anywho, I'm glad you liked my poem and thank you for taking the time to read it 🖤
Comment from papa55mike
Life is never fair, and I've found out the hard way. I love the passion you write with. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Life is never fair, and I've found out the hard way. I love the passion you write with. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Hi Mike!
You are absolutely right- life is never fair. We just gotta try to see the good in life, and not let the bad blot out the good.
Thank you so much for your kind words!!! I actually had some doubts about this poem, and your review helped dissolve those doubts! I'm a bit of a perfectionist with my writing, and a harsh critic of my own work too, haha.
I hope you have an amazing day as well.
Best wishes,
Keely
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
For me your poem shows heartbreak and loss. I like how you share that through the damaged ballerina. The imagery of spinning out of control and clinging to memories made me feel a sense of disorientation. It's a deeply moving poem that feels to real. Very powerful and well written!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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For me your poem shows heartbreak and loss. I like how you share that through the damaged ballerina. The imagery of spinning out of control and clinging to memories made me feel a sense of disorientation. It's a deeply moving poem that feels to real. Very powerful and well written!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Hi Michael!
I just want to say, your reviews never fail to put a smile on my face! I love knowing my writing is being appreciated.
I'm so glad you liked my poem, and to hear it was moving for you! That's what I was hoping to hear about it. I felt like my emotions were going to explode out of me until I sat down to write this poem, and I put a lot of emotion into this poem. I really do feel like a damaged ballerina at the moment, and I too feel a bit disorientation when my muse for this one crosses my mind. But with every day that passes, I feel a little better and my burden gets easier to carry.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my piece and for leaving such a nice review. I really do appreciate it🖤
-Keely
