Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

Such beautiful imagery you have created here. Here's hoping that the transition into the next life is as sparkly and lovely as you suggest. thanks for sharing! Very enjoyable.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024

Thanks for the excellent review and yes, I guess we'd better hope for that. This poem is very much in the vein of Denise Levertov, I don't know if you know her work; unabashed free verse with bright imagery. Check out Relearning the Alphabet and Oblique Prayers. estory

Comment from lyenochka

Exceptional

Such a cool metaphor - it's far more than "alchemy" - the mystery of gaining child-status by the Creator of the Universe and changing from this mortal life into some eternal form when we enter into His Presence.
I liked your allusion to Christ saying it's harder for a camel to go through an eye of a needle than for a rich man who depends on the power of riches. That stanza is my favorite part:
"Threads the eyes of needles
From caravans of camels
To the fingerprints of angels"

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024

Thanks again, my friend. I think we are birds who flock to together. estory

Comment from Harry Craft

Excellent

Great poem whatever style it is in. I recognized the eyes of needles and caravans of camels and thought of that saying in the Bible that states a rich man has the chance of getting to heaven as threading the eye of a needle with a camel. Very good! Keep up the good work!

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your encouraging comments. I wanted to express this miraculous transition from the failed flesh into the new brightness of salvation and the hereafter. estory

reply by Harry Craft on 10-Sep-2024

You are so welcome estory!

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Through the eye of a needle to the rest of eternity...our vision from this side might not be clear but the other side with the Lord waiting, arms out stretched will be as colorful or more as you have described. Well done!
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024

Thanks for the excellent review and your encouraging comments. This is one of the more upbeat poems in this collection, which kind of deals alot with corruption and decay and ruin. But there is still hope in the salvation of Christ. estory

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Exceptional

I enjoy reading this poem with a happy ending, the end of everything. It seems to me. I like all the metaphors and similes you used here, too.

Excellent.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024

Thanks again for the sixer and your continued support for my poetry. estory

Comment from Katiemae1977

Excellent

Thank so very much for writing this. I found it very esoteric and enjoyed it very much. I only wish it was longer I liked it so much. The last 2 lines were particularly interesting.
Thanks for your author's notes.
Awesome job
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2024

Thanks for the excellent review and the encouraging remarks. I was surprised by your wish for a longer poem...most people here like short and sweet. You must be a poetry lover. Well, if you like long poems, some are coming. Books and Ruins are pretty long. Check out Venice and Fallen Angels in my port. estory

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. I really believe that when we cross over to heaven that we will find that the colors and everything is just absolutely spectacular more than we can even dream of. I enjoyed your poem very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024

Thanks so much for the excellent review and I am glad you enjoyed this piece. I don't know what the world will be like, but I guess we can only express our intimations of it out of our experiences in this one. estory

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Your poem is enchanting! Love the word choics epecially 'fingerprints of angels'. Beautiful. The poem feels almost delicate and magical. I'm not sure where the magical starts and the real end. Really, such a stunning piece--thank you for sharing this lovely gem!

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful words of support for this piece. I am glad you found it so inspirational. It is one of the more upbeat pieces in this collection. estory

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

We live our lives in the earthiness of everyday experience and from this we produce both dross and jewels. Religion has a tendency to set the Almighty Creator up as a judge over our failings rather than one who celebrates our successes. I feel that your poem redresses that balance rather well.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024

Thanks again for the exceptional review. I think Christ stands ready to transform those who desire the transformation, and this is how I felt it might be expressed. estory

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

This poem points out different kinds of possibilities when examining mortal life or the end of it. The idea of finer, less available matter is interesting as well, and the reference to sunlight. I come from a religious background that says the spirit of each person is composed of a more refined sort of material akin to light. Nice share.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024

Thanks for the excellent review and your interesting perspective on the piece. I don't know what the next world will be like, but I guess we can only express our ideas of it in terms of our experiences in this one. estory