One Big Boat
A discussion between mother and son4 total reviews
Comment from Amelie Johns
This is a lovely dialogue between mother and son. It flows nicely between the two character's. The young boys dialogue is so realistic. You can experience the child-like enthusiasm that we all once had when we were that she. Anything is possible! Very well done. A beautiful story.
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This is a lovely dialogue between mother and son. It flows nicely between the two character's. The young boys dialogue is so realistic. You can experience the child-like enthusiasm that we all once had when we were that she. Anything is possible! Very well done. A beautiful story.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
Comment from Neonewman
This was a fun read. I enjoyed the mother-son conversation. Brilliant idea the son had to use one project for two classes.
I found one minor edit, or it may be intentional. I hope you don't mind.
"Am (I) the smartest son you have today?"
Great entry for this contest.
God bless,
Steve
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This was a fun read. I enjoyed the mother-son conversation. Brilliant idea the son had to use one project for two classes.
I found one minor edit, or it may be intentional. I hope you don't mind.
"Am (I) the smartest son you have today?"
Great entry for this contest.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
Comment from lancellot
Ah, so the surprise was the boat building is a play on the boy's name being Noah. Well, it feels like a nice dialogue between a respectful son and his loving mother. I think this will do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Ah, so the surprise was the boat building is a play on the boy's name being Noah. Well, it feels like a nice dialogue between a respectful son and his loving mother. I think this will do well in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Oh thank you!
Comment from Carol Clark2
This sounds like an interesting project for a teenager, but completing one project for two classes sounds 'iffy.' I love the final line of the story. You have done the dialogue well, and the first line identifies the characters without the use of tags. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
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This sounds like an interesting project for a teenager, but completing one project for two classes sounds 'iffy.' I love the final line of the story. You have done the dialogue well, and the first line identifies the characters without the use of tags. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024