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Comment from cupa tea
Nasty little tale...Glad I'm not Bob. I saw nothing to correct or change in your story. It was well written and I'm sure not to eat that or trust anyone named Crystal after that...lol
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Nasty little tale...Glad I'm not Bob. I saw nothing to correct or change in your story. It was well written and I'm sure not to eat that or trust anyone named Crystal after that...lol
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
Comment from Aiona
What a wacky but cautionary fable! I love the just complete outlandishness about plantains and people pushing men into wood chippers, but.... it actually happens.
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What a wacky but cautionary fable! I love the just complete outlandishness about plantains and people pushing men into wood chippers, but.... it actually happens.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a horror story and I was not expecting that! Ha ha ha! I enjoyed your inventive post and poor Bob was taken by surprise on his lunch break, love Dolly x x x
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This is a horror story and I was not expecting that! Ha ha ha! I enjoyed your inventive post and poor Bob was taken by surprise on his lunch break, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
Comment from lancellot
The writing structure is fine and so is the editing. The story does have some issues. Not sure how this is romance fiction. And, the reader is confused at the beginning. They reader will ask, Why leave the woodchipper running while on a 15-minute break? What worker would do that and waste gas? Plus, after the ring fall in the chipper, everyone would ask, 'Why not turn it off?' Before asking why kill him? OR why introduce Joe Biden's name, what did that have to do with the story?
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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The writing structure is fine and so is the editing. The story does have some issues. Not sure how this is romance fiction. And, the reader is confused at the beginning. They reader will ask, Why leave the woodchipper running while on a 15-minute break? What worker would do that and waste gas? Plus, after the ring fall in the chipper, everyone would ask, 'Why not turn it off?' Before asking why kill him? OR why introduce Joe Biden's name, what did that have to do with the story?
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thanks for reviewing. I don't have a great answer to these questions, other than that this story is not meant to be taken seriously, and context is provided in the notes. There is further context to the unfortunate character "Bob" but I can't provide it while the blind contest is live, as that would breach the contest rules. I started with Bob dying and worked backwards. If I can make it funnier though, I'm definitely open to suggestions on that.