Love's Daisy Chain
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Comment from Colorado Owl
Your poem does a great job of describing the duality of each of us. We learn to alive with the bad as well as the good, and hope that the scales will show there is more of the latter. (Of course, we know he loves you all the time!)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Your poem does a great job of describing the duality of each of us. We learn to alive with the bad as well as the good, and hope that the scales will show there is more of the latter. (Of course, we know he loves you all the time!)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review and generous stars. I appreciate it!
Comment from Wendy G
This is clever, and probably realistic, for nothing and no one is perfect. Your use of positives and negatives does reflect the plucking of petals from a daisy. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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This is clever, and probably realistic, for nothing and no one is perfect. Your use of positives and negatives does reflect the plucking of petals from a daisy. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Esther Brown
Well done. Good thing there is more to a relationship than romance or sex. Putting up with each other and acting loving when we don't feel like it. Liked your poem. Esther
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Well done. Good thing there is more to a relationship than romance or sex. Putting up with each other and acting loving when we don't feel like it. Liked your poem. Esther
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Begin Again
Your poem brought back many memories of when I would sit in the wild flower field near my house and pluck petals from the flowers with they love me, they love me not. It wasn't about a boy because I was too shy and my father would never have allowed it. I prefer yours which made me feel much better about those days. He loves me....
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Your poem brought back many memories of when I would sit in the wild flower field near my house and pluck petals from the flowers with they love me, they love me not. It wasn't about a boy because I was too shy and my father would never have allowed it. I prefer yours which made me feel much better about those days. He loves me....
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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I did the same, poor flowers! Thanks so much!
Comment from zanya
Yes an interesting juxtaposition here as to what might constitute love or the lack thereof - an inventory, as it were, but with a nice humorous touch and a great pic to illustrate,
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes an interesting juxtaposition here as to what might constitute love or the lack thereof - an inventory, as it were, but with a nice humorous touch and a great pic to illustrate,
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Love is never perfect~everyone has their faults, but if the love is strong enough, those faults can be overlooked for the joy of sharing love. Thanks so much for your review, appreciated.
Comment from lancellot
This is very good. Now, I'm not trying to rewrite your work. These are only suggestions.
notes:
He loves me when we walk with holding hands,
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He loves me when we walk while holding hands,
He loves me when he says I'm his adored,
He loves me not when showing he is bored.
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He loves me when he reminds me, I'm adored,
He loves me not when with me, he is bored.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is very good. Now, I'm not trying to rewrite your work. These are only suggestions.
notes:
He loves me when we walk with holding hands,
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He loves me when we walk while holding hands,
He loves me when he says I'm his adored,
He loves me not when showing he is bored.
-or-
He loves me when he reminds me, I'm adored,
He loves me not when with me, he is bored.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your suggestions and review as well as the generous stars. I will gratefully use one of your line changes (while instead of with) as I was having difficulty getting it to sound right to me. Appreciated!
Comment from royowen
Just loved that lady verse, we must always recognise that love is not a one way street, it's only successful when love reciprocated, love is supposed to be with condition, otherwise it is conditional, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Just loved that lady verse, we must always recognise that love is not a one way street, it's only successful when love reciprocated, love is supposed to be with condition, otherwise it is conditional, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much!
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Well done
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a brilliant He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not, in that with each He Loves Me, you describe why you think He Loves You Not. All of the reasons are clever and humorous. I especially like, "he can't wash a dish." Your last two lines and particularly romantic. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is a brilliant He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not, in that with each He Loves Me, you describe why you think He Loves You Not. All of the reasons are clever and humorous. I especially like, "he can't wash a dish." Your last two lines and particularly romantic. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from HarryT
I wonder what the mister's daisy chain would say. I enjoyed this effort. I find it clever and entertaining. The structure used contributed greatly to the flow and the rhyme was easy and not forced. Overall an excellent effort.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I wonder what the mister's daisy chain would say. I enjoyed this effort. I find it clever and entertaining. The structure used contributed greatly to the flow and the rhyme was easy and not forced. Overall an excellent effort.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much--I appreciate it!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
like how you chose to use the format he loves me he loves me not to construct a series of couplets exploring what love means to you and why you still love him despite his flaws
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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like how you chose to use the format he loves me he loves me not to construct a series of couplets exploring what love means to you and why you still love him despite his flaws
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much--I appreciate it!