Comment from AP Apgar

Exceptional

What an excellent Teikei-shi poem - and the picture presentation has no possibility of not being the best ever - what a find! - got me laughing - Love your humor - rice and corncobs lol. -think I'll save it - Your poem has a good syllable count and rhyme - well written, thank you for sharing, needed a good laugh today - too funny - little legs trucking along full speed!!!
Bless Alan

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024

Thanks, Alan. The picture is Gypsy's. Since she's the facilitator of the Japanese Poetry Club, she presents a picture and teaches us about the form-of-the-week then let's us have at it!

Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

Oh my word Rachelle,
there is almost a look of panic on this little guys face. This is priceless. I think this boy has been eating something more than rice to be this chubby. Thanks for sharing this great poem gal.
Blessings,
Tom

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024

And thank you for the terrific review! This picture was supplied by Gypsy for this Japanese Poetry Club I'm in that she's facilitating. This picture is hysterical. Debbie Pope cracked me up by saying it looks like the woman who baked the gingerbread boy who ran away, and now she's chasing him. HAHAHAHA.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

LOL I enjoyed reading this poem. It's very cute and adorable. I have a similar issue with my dachshund, Harley. His legs are only four and a half inches long. He loves to steal food. LOL

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024

I bet he's fast, though! There's a daschund @ the park where I take Li'l Swish every day, and that little cutie is FAST!!

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

Seems to me, if the Japanese are going against their grain to allow rhymes in their poetry, the poems should be fun. This poem shows the extent of your writing skills and imagination. I like the internal as well as external rhymes.
The photo reminds me of the woman chasing the Gingerbread Boy. Very nice!

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024

hahahahahaha!! You have now enhanced the already enjoyable image a thousand-fold!! You're spot on!!

Thank you for this lovely review. I appreciate it so very much. xoxox

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

That picture is hysterical! I like the font you've chosen for this - it reminds me of Japanese, for some reason.

Well, my money is on "chubby" here - he looks pretty fast on his feet, and he seems to know his way around a rice bowl.!

I know writing these poetic challenges was a summer project for you; will you continue? You're doing great with them.

Have a wonderful, super-duper day, sicko.

xo
Your asshole friend

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024

I was asking myself that, too. I actually think I might. They've been very enjoyable, and I've learned a lot. I liked "he seems to know his way around a rice bowl." HAHAHAHAAH.

Comment from Lori Mulligan

Exceptional

You couldn't possibly pair a photo better with your poem than you did here. It's absolutely hilarious. Between your words and the little boy's expression it's just a riot! This is one of my favorites of yours! And that's saying something!

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024

Oh, honestly, Lori, NO ONE is better at the hearty, helpful, and complimentary review than you. Thank you for this. I can't take credit for the pic, though; that is all Gypsy, who's the facilitator for this club. But it was a fun one to help create something for, I'll definitely say that! Anyway, thank you for your sweet and lovely review. xoxox

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

Your poem is very clever and it made me laugh. The picture is so cute. I like that you called it fast food, and referred to to-go meals. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024

Thanks, Carol. Gypsy was the supplier of the picture, though. She's the facilitator for this club and gives us a picture and a Japanese poem form to do every week. This was a fun one, though, for sure!! xoxo

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a fun write Rachelle and the picture is magical and your inventive verse made me smile. This little guy is cute and I loved the humour here, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024

Leave it to Gypsy to find such a cute image to assign us this week in the Japanese Poetry Club. She reminds me of you, Dolly, in that she NEVER runs out of creativity!! Thanks for the nice review. xoxox

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Rachelle, This is a very cute and well written poem you have penned for the Japanese Poetry club. What a cute picture you used to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024

Thanks, Teri. The picture was actually supplied by Gypsy, who facilitates the club. It definitely is a doozy, though!! xoxo

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like your fun pun in the title of "fast food". I'm guessing the little guy isn't too fast with his sumo-wrestler physique and the baby legs. Great entry to Gypsy's club challenge!

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024

Thanks. I've had such fun this entire summer with the prompts she chooses for us. This picture is particularly hilarious.