My Secret Place
We're never alone.17 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I immediately thought of that particular scripture, of course when we commune with God in that secretive way and in that secret place, reserved for our Father and us, the shine that this imposes on us is seen by all, beautifully written John. An excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I immediately thought of that particular scripture, of course when we commune with God in that secretive way and in that secret place, reserved for our Father and us, the shine that this imposes on us is seen by all, beautifully written John. An excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I believe everyone needs that special place he or she can get alone with God and tell Him their most intimate thoughts and feelings. If I don't start each day with HIm, my day is never complete. As always, I appreciate your review and kind words. Blessings to you. John
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I can see that
Comment from gansach
I enjoyed this entry for the rhyming spiritual poem. It has a beautiful presentation, great rhythm and rhyming, a very natural flow. It creates a peaceful and comforting picture of one communicating quietly with their higher power in a safe and happy place, receiving fortification for the day ahead. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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I enjoyed this entry for the rhyming spiritual poem. It has a beautiful presentation, great rhythm and rhyming, a very natural flow. It creates a peaceful and comforting picture of one communicating quietly with their higher power in a safe and happy place, receiving fortification for the day ahead. Nicely done!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your review. There is so much truth in what you say. I appreciate your kind and encouraging words.
John
Comment from Harry Craft
Wow! My friend. What an amazing poem! I can't even begin to write poetry like this. However, I really do enjoy reading it though. You have a talent for this form. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Wow! My friend. What an amazing poem! I can't even begin to write poetry like this. However, I really do enjoy reading it though. You have a talent for this form. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Of course you can! I love simplicity and writing from the heart. Your poem "A Wonderful Lady" has both those qualities with flying colors. You definitely have a gift for writing. I appreciate you taking the time to review my work and giving me such an encouraging review.
John
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You are very welcome John!
Comment from bob cullen
I can see why this poem was a contest winner. It delivers everything a gold medal winner requires. It has rhyme, rhythm and a powerful message. By the way, thank you for you service in Vietnam. Luckily, in 66 my name missed out on the ballot for National Service which would have seen me serve two years in the Military with almost half of that time in Vietnam.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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I can see why this poem was a contest winner. It delivers everything a gold medal winner requires. It has rhyme, rhythm and a powerful message. By the way, thank you for you service in Vietnam. Luckily, in 66 my name missed out on the ballot for National Service which would have seen me serve two years in the Military with almost half of that time in Vietnam.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Bob. I was one of the unlucky ones back in 1968. I tell everyone that I was the last person to be drafted. Right after I was plucked from civilian life, they instituted the lottery, which probably would not have kept me out anyway. I'm the black sheep in the family. All my brothers and uncles were in the Navy. Actually, I my older brother and I were in Vietnam at the same time. I was in the Army way down south in the Mekong Delta. He was on a ship off the coast of North Vietnam. His team's job was to make clandestine forays in North Vietnam to rescue downed pilots or bring back their bodies. All in all, not the best of times. I appreciate your review and kind words. John
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Congratulations on your contest win . This is a beautifully written poem with an easy flow to the words and a nice rhyme pattern. I love the message given and the final two lines sold it for me. thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Congratulations on your contest win . This is a beautifully written poem with an easy flow to the words and a nice rhyme pattern. I love the message given and the final two lines sold it for me. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. The last two lines are my favorite, as well. Thank you for your kind words and congratulations.
John
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Congrats on your contest win, John. Your poem is beautifully fluent with a delightful theme of a quiet sanctuary in which to pray and to feel at one with God. Well deserved! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Congrats on your contest win, John. Your poem is beautifully fluent with a delightful theme of a quiet sanctuary in which to pray and to feel at one with God. Well deserved! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I appreciate your congratulations and kind words.
John
Comment from jessizero
I can see why this piece won the rhyming spiritual poem contest! It was beautiful and had great rhymes. I love that God is your secret place. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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I can see why this piece won the rhyming spiritual poem contest! It was beautiful and had great rhymes. I love that God is your secret place. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words and best wishes.
John
Comment from nancyjam
Congratulations on your win. This is a wonderful poem about the power and comfort of prayer. It's good that you found a special place to feel close to God.
Nancy
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Congratulations on your win. This is a wonderful poem about the power and comfort of prayer. It's good that you found a special place to feel close to God.
Nancy
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your review, Nancy. I appreciate your kind words and congratulations.
John
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This poem beautifully captures the essence of finding a personal sanctuary and connecting with a higher presence. The imagery of a "secret place" and the morning mist creates a serene and intimate setting. The rhythmic flow and simple, yet evocative language help convey the sense of peace and spiritual connection you experience in this sacred space.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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This poem beautifully captures the essence of finding a personal sanctuary and connecting with a higher presence. The imagery of a "secret place" and the morning mist creates a serene and intimate setting. The rhythmic flow and simple, yet evocative language help convey the sense of peace and spiritual connection you experience in this sacred space.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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I appreciate your review, Patty. Your words captured the very essence of the poem and beautifully described the message I was trying to convey. For that I am grateful. Thank you. John
Comment from Harambe is ur Daddy
In total seriousness, I was thinking about this verse this morning while I was out walking in the mist on a pristine trail in the woods, punctuated by an occasional sprouting mushroom. Unfortunately my attention was distracted by the large coffee and two egg sausage mcsandwiches I had just consumed, and after facing the realization that the prairie dog could not be contained until I made it back to McDonalds, I was redirected by forces of nature into picking a bunch of oak leaves and finding my perfect place to squat off the trail. This wilderness bathroom was all I was able to think about while reading your first 2 1/2 stanzas. Hopefully this does not land me in a special tier of Dante's Inferno.
Your entry is well formed and the only rhyming issue I spotted was with ASLEEP and RETREAT. I'd consider going with KEEP, in the style of Robert Frost's line about having promises to keep from "the path not taken", written about walking in the New Hampshire woods (where I was this morning).
Thanks for the read and sorry for corrupting this nice piece,
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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In total seriousness, I was thinking about this verse this morning while I was out walking in the mist on a pristine trail in the woods, punctuated by an occasional sprouting mushroom. Unfortunately my attention was distracted by the large coffee and two egg sausage mcsandwiches I had just consumed, and after facing the realization that the prairie dog could not be contained until I made it back to McDonalds, I was redirected by forces of nature into picking a bunch of oak leaves and finding my perfect place to squat off the trail. This wilderness bathroom was all I was able to think about while reading your first 2 1/2 stanzas. Hopefully this does not land me in a special tier of Dante's Inferno.
Your entry is well formed and the only rhyming issue I spotted was with ASLEEP and RETREAT. I'd consider going with KEEP, in the style of Robert Frost's line about having promises to keep from "the path not taken", written about walking in the New Hampshire woods (where I was this morning).
Thanks for the read and sorry for corrupting this nice piece,
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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I think that's the most unique and well-described review I've ever received. I struggled with the rhyming issue as well, and I appreciate your suggestion. No apology necessary...I thoroughly enjoyed your review,
John
