Comment from
RodG
Congrats on your first milestone and welcome to FanStory. I do hope this poem is not based on your life, Poet. I am not sure what defines a one-liner, but I think it might be one sentence. Rewrite with AND joining the two phrases.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
Good advice Rod. Thank you for the review.
Comment from
Shirley Ann Bunyan
One line poems are not easy, but you certainly got everything in here in so few words. The reader sees the back story of a broken relationship, a desertion and the killer ending 'except me'. Very clever, succinct and quite poignant. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
Thank you Shirley Ann. Your review has made my day!
reply by Shirley Ann Bunyan on 23-Aug-2024