Grandpa's Keys
A Very Senior Moment13 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is a good story for the 80 Word Flash Fiction contest. I did notice one spelling error that needs correcting, nothing major.
"There (THEY'RE) right here, grandpa, where you
Good luck in the contest. thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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This is a good story for the 80 Word Flash Fiction contest. I did notice one spelling error that needs correcting, nothing major.
"There (THEY'RE) right here, grandpa, where you
Good luck in the contest. thanks for sharing
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks. I finally fixed it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Within eighty words, your story started with suspense. Who were the strangers in Grandpa's house? As the story progresses, Grandpa wants to leave, but can't find his keys. The fact that they are in the refrigerator is sad, but may be an early sign of cognitive decline. This is creative fiction, but could be true. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Within eighty words, your story started with suspense. Who were the strangers in Grandpa's house? As the story progresses, Grandpa wants to leave, but can't find his keys. The fact that they are in the refrigerator is sad, but may be an early sign of cognitive decline. This is creative fiction, but could be true. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ugh. This is what my nightmares are made of, I have to say. The wife of one of my piano students had Alzheimer's, but, to his credit, he would not have her put into a facility. One day, in the middle of our lesson, she called to him, "Eddie! Are these your shoes here in the front hallway?" My student replied, "The plaid high heels? No, Ma, those aren't mine."
Well done entry. Good luck to you in the 80-Word Flash Fiction Contest. xoxo
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Ugh. This is what my nightmares are made of, I have to say. The wife of one of my piano students had Alzheimer's, but, to his credit, he would not have her put into a facility. One day, in the middle of our lesson, she called to him, "Eddie! Are these your shoes here in the front hallway?" My student replied, "The plaid high heels? No, Ma, those aren't mine."
Well done entry. Good luck to you in the 80-Word Flash Fiction Contest. xoxo
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks!
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Sure!
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear! Poor old Gramps is losing it and he certainly shouldn't be driving if he doesn't recognize his own family and doesn't know where he put his keys! Best wishes in the contest!
"There right here, grandpa (They're)
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Oh dear! Poor old Gramps is losing it and he certainly shouldn't be driving if he doesn't recognize his own family and doesn't know where he put his keys! Best wishes in the contest!
"There right here, grandpa (They're)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks for mentioning that. I fixed it.
Comment from Begin Again
Well, I haven't put anything in the refrigerator yet, but I have forgotten what I was looking for...including my glasses that were on top of my head. LOL Yet, if the family needs an answer to something...guess who they call, so I guess I'm not too far gone just yet.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Well, I haven't put anything in the refrigerator yet, but I have forgotten what I was looking for...including my glasses that were on top of my head. LOL Yet, if the family needs an answer to something...guess who they call, so I guess I'm not too far gone just yet.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from royowen
I agree, such a shame to break a little girl's heart, I hope I never do that, my mind's fine at the moment, and Elaine's, yes, we live in hope don't we Stan? Well done, how's your story coming along. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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I agree, such a shame to break a little girl's heart, I hope I never do that, my mind's fine at the moment, and Elaine's, yes, we live in hope don't we Stan? Well done, how's your story coming along. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thanks for asking. I've been busy in my cleaning business last couple months. I plan to get back at it soon. Thanks for asking!
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Looking forward Stan
Comment from BethShelby
This is good flash with a twist. I is a bit sad because it lets us all know that Gramps is suffering from Alzheimer disease. What is is with the refirgerator? That is were most with the problem put thing.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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This is good flash with a twist. I is a bit sad because it lets us all know that Gramps is suffering from Alzheimer disease. What is is with the refirgerator? That is were most with the problem put thing.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a revealing 80 Word Flash Fiction entry. The tone of confusion and the fat tears of granddaughter, Monica, and the word 'strangers' let the reader see things from Gramps' point of view.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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This is a revealing 80 Word Flash Fiction entry. The tone of confusion and the fat tears of granddaughter, Monica, and the word 'strangers' let the reader see things from Gramps' point of view.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest but you have a wonderful day and God bless you the day. I put the sugar in the refrigerator in the milk in the oven. I know that there is a problem with me. Patricia.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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This is very well written for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest but you have a wonderful day and God bless you the day. I put the sugar in the refrigerator in the milk in the oven. I know that there is a problem with me. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from jmdg1954
Excellent 80 word flash fiction post. Great last line as told by granddaughter Monica!
Yup, many of us could very be in grandpas shoes one day.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Excellent 80 word flash fiction post. Great last line as told by granddaughter Monica!
Yup, many of us could very be in grandpas shoes one day.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks!
