Act of Endurance
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Comment from Pamusart
Hi TPAC
Are you in Great Britain? You're talking about the Royal family there because I thought the Royal family there were just figureheads and that they didn't really rule that the parliament and prime minister ruled.
So I'm wondering if you're somewhere else. You don't have to tell me where you are in case it will get you in trouble. You can just let me know you live or don't live in Great Britain because I'm curious.
I'm trying to think of where else there would be Royals. Just about every country has gotten rid of them. Perhaps a country in Africa.
Thank you for writing this poem. I enjoyed reading it.
I've documented some things below, but there is more if you want me to let you know what they are just reply to this review and tell me and I'll send you some more stuff
Here killer's
"end me, seen is a smile; upon my killer face: laughing at me."
Here I think this is correct
This fight, is a constant war. Hidden are it's actual intents, feelings,
"This fight, is a constant war, in hid are it's actual intents, feelings,"
Will you please tell me more about what In aims means? Then we can come up with a better way to say it
What do you think of this?
There's no desire to do the right thing; just wishes of those that makes its
"There is no aims for right, just wishes of those that makes its "
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Hi TPAC
Are you in Great Britain? You're talking about the Royal family there because I thought the Royal family there were just figureheads and that they didn't really rule that the parliament and prime minister ruled.
So I'm wondering if you're somewhere else. You don't have to tell me where you are in case it will get you in trouble. You can just let me know you live or don't live in Great Britain because I'm curious.
I'm trying to think of where else there would be Royals. Just about every country has gotten rid of them. Perhaps a country in Africa.
Thank you for writing this poem. I enjoyed reading it.
I've documented some things below, but there is more if you want me to let you know what they are just reply to this review and tell me and I'll send you some more stuff
Here killer's
"end me, seen is a smile; upon my killer face: laughing at me."
Here I think this is correct
This fight, is a constant war. Hidden are it's actual intents, feelings,
"This fight, is a constant war, in hid are it's actual intents, feelings,"
Will you please tell me more about what In aims means? Then we can come up with a better way to say it
What do you think of this?
There's no desire to do the right thing; just wishes of those that makes its
"There is no aims for right, just wishes of those that makes its "
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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I'm not in Britain, the thought of Royals, are the wealthy, whom control: thanking for your suggestions. No aims for right, are those desiring a bad against the flesh: punishing them. Hopeful this address, your wonderful curiosity about this write. You definitely got a charge from its statements. Thanking you for this response.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This passage evokes a sense of intense conflict and betrayal. The imagery of being stabbed and the finality of the situation create a visceral impact, highlighting feelings of vulnerability and helplessness. The mention of a "killer face" and the absence of justice underscores a profound sense of injustice and personal betrayal.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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This passage evokes a sense of intense conflict and betrayal. The imagery of being stabbed and the finality of the situation create a visceral impact, highlighting feelings of vulnerability and helplessness. The mention of a "killer face" and the absence of justice underscores a profound sense of injustice and personal betrayal.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Yeah. That's about right. At age five, confronting a chain gang, officer points his rifle towards the back of my head. Prisoners illustrating more right: telling me to go on about my business: then this guard. And much, much more. Lucky for me, I'm close to death (70) escape this belittling nightmare: not to disturb those sleep. Thanking you for your generous rate and uplifting words. At least, you acknowledged my claims.
Comment from bonespur
This seems like a good candidate for the contest. The structure seems right and you have an interesting topic. I'm assuming you are talking about bull fighting. I think this sport should be outlawed. Good job and good luck..have a blessed day
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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This seems like a good candidate for the contest. The structure seems right and you have an interesting topic. I'm assuming you are talking about bull fighting. I think this sport should be outlawed. Good job and good luck..have a blessed day
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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No. Not a bull fight. More like untangled matter which must be faced before I leave here. A good shot to a fools head: answers the beef. Thanking you dispute, for a generous rate.