Schmekel and Clekel McGee
A funny poem71 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Thoroughly enjoyable, I take from this that different people enjoy different things or just enjoy them in different ways, you brought back memories of the fair and the games we used to play, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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Thoroughly enjoyable, I take from this that different people enjoy different things or just enjoy them in different ways, you brought back memories of the fair and the games we used to play, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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LOL! Well, thank you kahpot. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Amelie Johns
I enjoyed reading your funny poem. I almost want to be part of this trio! This is a great rhyming poem. So good is the rhyming, it almost trips you up. I enjoyed it even more when I read it a second time. I like the unique names too. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes,
Amelie
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed reading your funny poem. I almost want to be part of this trio! This is a great rhyming poem. So good is the rhyming, it almost trips you up. I enjoyed it even more when I read it a second time. I like the unique names too. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes,
Amelie
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2024
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LOl! Well, thank you for the great review Amelie. I really appreciate that!
Comment from AliMom
I like this from the title to the end. I like the introductory stanza. It grabs you right away with its funny names and makes you want to explore more about this trio. You characterize each personality (man or dog) and make them both charming and likeable.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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I like this from the title to the end. I like the introductory stanza. It grabs you right away with its funny names and makes you want to explore more about this trio. You characterize each personality (man or dog) and make them both charming and likeable.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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LOL! Well, thank you AliMom. I really appreciate the kind words and your review!
Comment from Frank Malley
I would've started this poem 'This is a funny poem by me." This would avoid resorting to a beat filler like the "you see" that the author uses. There are other spots where the enforced scheme detracts from the ideas and humor of the poem, although it ultimately reads entertainingly.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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I would've started this poem 'This is a funny poem by me." This would avoid resorting to a beat filler like the "you see" that the author uses. There are other spots where the enforced scheme detracts from the ideas and humor of the poem, although it ultimately reads entertainingly.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you so much Frank for your insight and review. I really appreciate that!
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Be well, Harry. Frank
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Thank you Sir!
Comment from MissMerri
I see you describe yourself as someone who loves to write. I think that is a feeling most of us here would readily relate to, and I commend you for finding a place like this to post your writing. As for your funny poem, I did enjoy reading about the antics of Schmekel, Freckle and Clekel. You've done a good job of bringing these three to life in your lines, and you also did a good job of choosing creative rhymes. There was nothing boring in this poem. It was fun to read.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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I see you describe yourself as someone who loves to write. I think that is a feeling most of us here would readily relate to, and I commend you for finding a place like this to post your writing. As for your funny poem, I did enjoy reading about the antics of Schmekel, Freckle and Clekel. You've done a good job of bringing these three to life in your lines, and you also did a good job of choosing creative rhymes. There was nothing boring in this poem. It was fun to read.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Lol! Well, thank you Miss Merri. I really appreciate your kind words and review!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Sorry pal, the rythm is off on the poem. Try reading it aloud several times. I am very behind with mt reviewing. So, I cannot edit it for you. When I get all caught up and my house is on order. I will help you with it. Keep writing. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Sorry pal, the rythm is off on the poem. Try reading it aloud several times. I am very behind with mt reviewing. So, I cannot edit it for you. When I get all caught up and my house is on order. I will help you with it. Keep writing. Karen
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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LOL!. O.k, Karen. I appreciate that!
Comment from karenina
Sometimes, it's just plain fun to write a silly verse that isn't constrained to strict rules or meter...
This is very pleasant to read...and read a second time!
The theme was fun, the antics silly, and every muse enjoys a romp in the park now and then!
This made me smile, and Lord knows we can al use a bit more of THAT!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Sometimes, it's just plain fun to write a silly verse that isn't constrained to strict rules or meter...
This is very pleasant to read...and read a second time!
The theme was fun, the antics silly, and every muse enjoys a romp in the park now and then!
This made me smile, and Lord knows we can al use a bit more of THAT!
Karenina
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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LOL! Well, Karenina. If you smiled, then I won. It's all about the fun! I appreciate your kind words and review!
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Then you WON!
Ta-Da!
That was easy!
:)
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LOL! Well, thank you.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Harry,
This is such a sweet poem. (I know about 'tats' my dad owned a pair or two).
Your poem brought a smile to my face. Especially when Freckle had cotton candy in his hair.
A lovely trio.
Best wishes, Harry.
Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Harry,
This is such a sweet poem. (I know about 'tats' my dad owned a pair or two).
Your poem brought a smile to my face. Especially when Freckle had cotton candy in his hair.
A lovely trio.
Best wishes, Harry.
Cindy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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LOL! Well, good Cindy. If you had a smile on your face then I have succeeded! I believe poetry can have a message, but should be fun too. Thank you for your review. I really appreciate it!
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hi again Harry!
I enjoyed your sing-songy poem about this audacious trio! Your imagery was clever and fun. I would only make one suggestion, and that has to do with your rhythm. Syllable counting sometimes is not enough to maintain a pleasing rhythm. "A metrical foot usually consists of two or three beats. They appear in an arrangement of unstressed and stressed syllables. For example, an iamb and trochee contain two beats while a dactyl and anapaest contain three." In your line:
"about Schmekel and Clekel McGee"
dum-dum DUM-dum dum DUM-dum dum-DUM.
This is a difficult pattern to repeat, although in this line it totally works. Throughout the poem, there does appear to be vagueness to your rhythmic pattern that loses you a little precision and makes the reading of the poem less satisfying than it could be. Forgive me for being presumptuous, but if it is useful for you, please review internet resources to become better acquainted with poetic meter if you have not already
Thank you for sharing your talent, and I look forward to reading more of your poetry!
Patrick
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Hi again Harry!
I enjoyed your sing-songy poem about this audacious trio! Your imagery was clever and fun. I would only make one suggestion, and that has to do with your rhythm. Syllable counting sometimes is not enough to maintain a pleasing rhythm. "A metrical foot usually consists of two or three beats. They appear in an arrangement of unstressed and stressed syllables. For example, an iamb and trochee contain two beats while a dactyl and anapaest contain three." In your line:
"about Schmekel and Clekel McGee"
dum-dum DUM-dum dum DUM-dum dum-DUM.
This is a difficult pattern to repeat, although in this line it totally works. Throughout the poem, there does appear to be vagueness to your rhythmic pattern that loses you a little precision and makes the reading of the poem less satisfying than it could be. Forgive me for being presumptuous, but if it is useful for you, please review internet resources to become better acquainted with poetic meter if you have not already
Thank you for sharing your talent, and I look forward to reading more of your poetry!
Patrick
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you Patrick for your insight and your great review. I really appreciate that!
Comment from lancellot
It's cute and it does tell a nice little story about them. The structure, if you're interested, could use a bit more consistency with the rhyme from stanza to stanza. It changes and fades at times. But, overall, this is good work.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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It's cute and it does tell a nice little story about them. The structure, if you're interested, could use a bit more consistency with the rhyme from stanza to stanza. It changes and fades at times. But, overall, this is good work.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Thanks again Lancellot for your review.
