Top Stair
Stairway to heartbreak.4 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A stirring, beautifully expressed tale about a child shivering on that top stair, terrified by her parents' arguing. I like the way you succeeded in pushing this genre to a different level (excuse the pun), portraying the emotional harm and distress caused to children in homes where there is domestic abuse. A great and poetic last sentence too! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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A stirring, beautifully expressed tale about a child shivering on that top stair, terrified by her parents' arguing. I like the way you succeeded in pushing this genre to a different level (excuse the pun), portraying the emotional harm and distress caused to children in homes where there is domestic abuse. A great and poetic last sentence too! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Debbie x
Comment from Aiona
What a heart-breaking short piece. Description was very good, and I could picture (even without the picture) the young girl sitting wide-eyed, eyes dilated in fear, waiting to see if she should run or stay. I didn't see any typos.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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What a heart-breaking short piece. Description was very good, and I could picture (even without the picture) the young girl sitting wide-eyed, eyes dilated in fear, waiting to see if she should run or stay. I didn't see any typos.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Ice Traigh
Boy that really sets the scene of an all-too-familiar scenario that we as children can take to heart. It was always so scary hearing parents fight, because we had no context as to the severity of the situation. If it was a big deal, then we were all in trouble. If it wasn't, then the one doing the yelling had some sort of problem. It's lose-lose for everyone involved. Yet, we still do it. Crazy.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Boy that really sets the scene of an all-too-familiar scenario that we as children can take to heart. It was always so scary hearing parents fight, because we had no context as to the severity of the situation. If it was a big deal, then we were all in trouble. If it wasn't, then the one doing the yelling had some sort of problem. It's lose-lose for everyone involved. Yet, we still do it. Crazy.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for reviewing my work.
Comment from jessizero
This was a heartbreaking story that was well-written. "Mummies are not supposed to cry" was gut-wrenching. I liked your take on the "staircase" writing prompt. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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This was a heartbreaking story that was well-written. "Mummies are not supposed to cry" was gut-wrenching. I liked your take on the "staircase" writing prompt. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thank you Jessi.