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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from Sanku
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WIth SAmi and a pregnant Sarah the situation is tense Noah's burden is doubled .i think it is action time and am looking forward to the next.. That they are armed is a reason for concern...

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
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Barbara,
Your chapter moves your story quite nicely.
You have nice dialogue. Your punctuation is good. Your story is very interesting.
Human trafficking goes on in a lot of countries, including the U.S. it's great that you expose this wrong through your novel.
Great story, Barbara.
Best wishes,
Cindy

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Daylily
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An unexpected twist. Timely, as well. This is a chapter with building excitement, well-written, as always.

Nothing was noticeable that needed correcting or clarifying.

Another excellent chapter, my friend. :-)

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Things are hotting up, I wonder if they are more than just illegals, if they are armed. Perhaps they are after Sami? But how would they know she is here? This is getting tense. And then there is Sarah, she's pregant, and we don't know how Bob took the news. I hope to be around for the next chapter. Well done! :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
    Many of the got aways are armed and up to no good. They have committed numerous violent crimes. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Excellent chapter, it's very exciting, so much is going on. I hope they all be safe.

The conversations between Sami and Noah are very romantic.

Well done

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the wonderful support.
Comment from AliMom
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I don't know the particulars of illegal crossings or human traffickers but I do find your chapter engaging. Elements such as Sarah's pregnancy and the budding romance between the two lead characters remind us that the world continues to move in spite of danger around us. I like the easy banter between the two love-birds. It sounds completely natural. That they have to be concerned about other people seeing their displays of affection add an urgency and romance to their pairing. I am eager to see whether their romance comes to fruition. I even like the dog.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Looks like things are about to get even more serious and possibly dangerous and there isn't much time to prepare. At least they are taking time out for lunch, which would probably be my first thought. LOL.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
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The testing of a lot of relationships are forged in the crucible of tension and trouble, it seems that the relationship between Noah and Sami, it the midst of a mystery, they are developing and cementing their relationship, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by royowen on 19-Aug-2024
    Welcome Barbara
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Drama is really building now with sightings of these illegal migrants and I like the detail of instruction given to conceal their presence there. Also the contrast between the earlier relaxed dialogue between Noah and Sami and the more tense and pragmatic discussion later in the chapter. Great job, Barbara! Debbie

Noah, if there are a(t) least a dozen men...

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    Thank you for the catch. I have added that missing 't'. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Another possible bit of trouble to jazz stuff up. It seems strange though that a safe house would be placed in a well known hot spot for border crossings. Who would add the additional problems to a already dicey problems. Karen

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    In Texas there are all kinds of hot spots because of the amount crossing. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 19-Aug-2024
    Is it really that bad? Karen
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
    It has calmed down some because of the fence our governor built. He didn't do it earlier because Biden's government outlawed it. It's been through the court system. Yes, it was extremely horrible. It was not safe.